Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, grammatically correct, and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid tense and article mistakes and unnecessary words. For example, use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, name the bike clearly, and give one concrete reason why you enjoyed it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got my first bike, a CD70, at about age 12, and I loved it because it was fast and had a pleasant engine sound. As a result, I spent many afternoons riding around the neighborhood with my friends.

제안: Answer directly, then support with one or two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (use ‘they’ or ‘motorbikes’, correct verbs) and avoid repetition. Mention concrete examples such as traffic, cost, or short-distance trips to make the answer more informative.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They are cheaper to buy and run than cars, and because of heavy traffic people can often weave through small gaps to reach their destination faster. For short trips like commuting to work or the market, many people prefer bikes because they save time and money.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about having a bike when you were a child (past time). The verb should be in the past tense 'had' to match the time reference. Suggestion: use past tense for states in the past (I had, I was, I owned).

× When I was driving I was thrilled off around about age of 12 and I bought for my first bike and it was in CD70.

✓ When I was about 12, I was thrilled and bought my first bike, a CD70.

Problems: incorrect verb choice 'driving' (context refers to being a child, use 'was' or omit), awkward phrase 'thrilled off around about age of 12', and wrong word order 'bought for my first bike'. Also 'it was in CD70' is incorrect; use 'a CD70' to name the model. Suggestion: simplify the sentence, place age phrase at start, use correct past tense verbs and correct article for model names.

× It was very amazing.

✓ It was amazing.

'Very amazing' is redundant and informal; 'amazing' alone is sufficient. Also keep concise descriptions. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary intensifiers and use natural collocations.

× While speed of the bike is very high, it sounds very pleasant and I really enjoyed while riding it so I.

✓ The bike was fast, it sounded pleasant, and I really enjoyed riding it.

Multiple errors: tense inconsistency (use past: 'was', 'sounded', 'enjoyed'), wrong noun phrase 'While speed of the bike', incorrect use 'enjoyed while riding it' and sentence fragment ending with 'so I'. Suggestion: use correct noun phrase 'the bike was fast', consistent past tense, and remove unnecessary conjunctions to form one coherent sentence.

× Yes, I think of bikes are popular in our country because it is an easy way to move it from one point to another while driving from a car.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because they are an easy way to move from one point to another compared with cars.

Errors: extra 'of' after 'think', incorrect verb agreement 'it is' referring to bikes (plural), awkward phrase 'while driving from a car'. Use plural pronoun 'they' and compare with 'cars'. Suggestion: remove 'of', ensure subject-pronoun agreement, and use clearer comparative phrasing.

× For moving from one place, whether you need a you stuck in a huge traffic while on the bike, you passes me through the small gaps and does not face any difficulty and going through the traffic and bikes will cost.

✓ When moving from one place, if you get stuck in heavy traffic, a bike can pass through small gaps and avoid many difficulties, and bikes cost less to operate.

This sentence has many structural and grammatical errors: incorrect conjunctions, repeated words ('you need a you'), wrong verb forms ('you passes me'), wrong tense and noun forms. It also ends abruptly. Suggestion: split into clauses, use conditional 'if', correct verbs 'get stuck', 'can pass', and clarify the final point about cost with 'cost less' or 'are cheaper to operate'.