Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and tense consistency, make the answer more concise and coherent, and add a clear closing sentence. Use past tense for childhood events, reduce filler words, and connect ideas with linking words (e.g., "because", "although", "but"). Aim for 3–4 sentences: a direct topic sentence, a brief supporting detail, and a concluding remark or feeling.

예시: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a lightweight bike with training wheels when I was three, so I could learn to cycle safely. At first I found it challenging, but after a few weeks I became confident and enjoyed riding around the neighborhood.

제안: Improve grammar, article use, and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use singular/plural and articles correctly (e.g., "bicycles are", "the local governments"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Local governments have been promoting cycling to reduce traffic and lower carbon emissions, so many people now cycle to work or school. As a result, bike lanes and public bike-sharing schemes have become more common in cities.

× Yes. Oh, I have a bike when I was a child because my mother bought me a lightweight bike when I was just three years old.

✓ Yes. Oh, I had a bike when I was a child because my mother bought me a lightweight bike when I was just three years old.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events (I had a bike).

× It has a balancer so that I can learn how to cycle.

✓ It had training wheels so that I could learn how to cycle.

The original uses present tense 'has' and 'can' while referring to a past event; also 'balancer' is an uncommon term here. Use past tense 'had' and 'could'. Use 'training wheels' (more natural) instead of 'balancer'.

× At first I find it challenging, but after.

✓ At first I found it challenging, but I improved after a while.

The fragment 'but after.' is incomplete and present tense 'find' conflicts with past context. Complete the sentence and use past tense 'found' to match the past narrative. Suggestion: provide a full clause after 'but' and maintain consistent tense (I found ... but I improved after a while).

× Yes, of course bicycle is very popular in my country, especially the the local government units are encouraging the individuals to ride a bike or cycle to work than driving a car because it produces less carbon.

✓ Yes, of course bicycles are very popular in my country, especially because local government units are encouraging people to ride bikes or cycle to work rather than drive cars because it produces less carbon.

Multiple issues: 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' when speaking generally; extra 'the' repeated; 'the individuals' is unnatural — use 'people'; parallel forms require plural 'ride bikes' or 'cycle to work' and compare with 'rather than drive cars'; 'than' should be 'rather than' for contrast. Maintain plurality and natural noun choices.