Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện điểm ngôn ngữ và cấu trúc: (1) Tránh tiếng lắp (uh) và sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ ‘GI birthday gift’ không rõ — có thể là ‘big birthday gift’ hoặc ‘gift for my birthday’). (2) Dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau bởi 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (mô tả chiếc xe, cảm xúc khi nhận, tuổi khi nhận). (3) Giữ không quá 5 câu, mạch lạc và tự nhiên. Ví dụ thực hành cần nêu rõ màu sắc, kích thước, hoặc hoạt động bạn làm với xe để làm phong phú câu trả lời.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents gave me my first bike when I was seven as a birthday present. It was small and pink with a white basket, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood every afternoon.

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, mạch lạc và từ nối: (1) Sử dụng thì và cấu trúc rõ ràng: so sánh quá khứ và hiện tại bằng linking words như ‘In the past’ và ‘Nowadays’ hoặc ‘however’. (2) Sửa lỗi câu (ví dụ ‘made most of the children’ → ‘most children used to’). (3) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (số liệu, ví dụ về đường phố, hoặc biện pháp an toàn) để câu trả lời cụ thể hơn và thuyết phục hơn.

예시: In the past, most children used to have a bike and often rode to school. However, nowadays traffic is much heavier and there are more accidents, so parents are usually reluctant to let their children cycle to school.

× I remember that my first bike was given to me by my parents as a GI birthday gift.

✓ I remember that my first bike was given to me by my parents as a big birthday gift.

'GI' is likely a typo; if intended word is 'big', replace it. The sentence structure uses passive voice with 'was given' which correctly uses the past participle 'given' after 'was'. No grammatical past participle error exists but the typo creates confusion. Suggestion: correct the word to the intended adjective and keep the passive form 'was given'.

× Uh, and it had a pink color and is.

✓ It was pink.

The original fragment 'it had a pink color and is' is ungrammatical and contains redundancy. Use a simple past description 'It was pink' to match the past tense context. To improve, avoid mixing 'had' and 'is' and choose one tense; here past 'was' is appropriate.

× I think it was in the past made most of the children under 18 had their own bike to go to school.

✓ I think in the past most children under 18 had their own bikes to go to school.

The original sentence mixes tenses and includes redundant words 'it was in the past made'. Use simple past 'had' and plural 'bikes' for general statement. Also remove unnecessary 'made' and 'it was'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct plural form.

× But nowadays the traffic is crowded and there are many accidents so parents rarely let their child try to go to school by bike.

✓ But nowadays traffic is heavy and there are many accidents, so parents rarely let their children try to go to school by bike.

Use 'traffic is heavy' rather than 'crowded' and change 'their child' to 'their children' to agree with plural 'parents'. Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity. 'Rarely let their children go to school by bike' is more natural; 'try to' is unnecessary.