Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on grammar (past tense agreement and subject-verb), clarity, and fluency. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and pronouns, avoid repetition, and give one brief supporting detail. Use linking words if adding a reason.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I had health problems that made cycling difficult. As a result, my parents preferred to carry me or use a stroller instead.

제안: Improve noun forms and article use (bikes, air-conditioned buses), avoid redundancy ("in my opinion, I think"), and make reasons concise and specific. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and give a clear contrast or example.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in Thailand because it's hot year-round, so many people prefer air-conditioned buses or private cars. For example, commuters often choose the BTS Skytrain in Bangkok to avoid the heat.

× I didn't have a bike when I were a child because because I was we sure impaired. So I did not necessarily have bike.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was unsure. So I did not necessarily have a bike.

Errors: 'were' should be 'was' for the singular first person in past tense (subject-verb agreement/past tense). 'because because' is a repetition. 'we sure impaired' is incorrect word choice and structure; likely meant 'unsure'. 'have bike' needs the article 'a'. Suggestions: Use 'I was' with 'a child'; remove duplicate words; replace incorrect phrase with 'I was unsure' or specify the reason; include the indefinite article before singular countable nouns, e.g., 'a bike'.

× In my opinion, I think bike is not popular in Thailand because the weather in Thailand usually hot all over the year, so many people use bars that have air conditioner or public transportation that.

✓ In my opinion, I think bikes are not popular in Thailand because the weather in Thailand is usually hot all year, so many people use bars with air conditioning or public transportation.

Errors: 'bike is' should be plural 'bikes are' to refer generally to bicycles (plural and subject-verb agreement), which also relates to quantifier/number use. 'usually hot all over the year' should be 'is usually hot all year' (missing verb and more natural phrasing). 'bars that have air conditioner' is awkward; use 'bars with air conditioning'. The final 'that' is unnecessary. Suggestions: Use plural when speaking generally ('bikes are'), include the verb 'is' for 'the weather is', use natural noun phrases like 'air conditioning', and remove extra words like trailing 'that'.