Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak more clearly and organize your answer: start with a direct topic sentence, then give two brief, specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "it's convenient", "children", "without their parents") and avoid filler sounds like "umm." Keep it to no more than 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was about seven, and I rode it around my neighborhood with friends. Because of that, I learned balance and confidence early on, which helped me ride more challenging bikes later. Also, my parents taught me basic safety rules before letting me go out alone.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and expand with one or two specific observations using linking words. Avoid hesitations and finish with a short reason or example. Use correct phrasing (e.g., "many people" not "many.").

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, every morning I see many people cycling in parks and along riverside paths to exercise. In addition, bicycles are often used for short commutes, especially in busy city centers where they are faster than cars.

× Yes I did, I think every child should have a bike because it's convenience on how child can learn a new vehicle and also going around umm without parents are already have parent teaching them how to ride.

✓ Yes, I did. I think every child should have a bike because it's convenient; a child can learn to ride a new vehicle and also get around without parents once they have been taught how to ride.

This sentence has multiple issues: incorrect adjective/adverb form ('convenience' should be the adjective 'convenient') and sentence structure problems. Use 'convenient' to describe the bike, not the noun 'convenience'. Also replace 'how child can learn a new vehicle' with 'a child can learn to ride a new vehicle' to use correct verb patterns. 'Going around without parents are already have parent teaching them' is ungrammatical; I changed it to 'get around without parents once they have been taught how to ride' to convey the intended meaning and correct subject-verb relationships. Suggestions: use correct adjective/adverb forms, simplify clauses, ensure subjects and verbs match, and avoid redundant filler words like 'umm'.

× Yes, I do think so, because in the early morning I see that many. Uh, people riding their bike to exercise?

✓ Yes, I do. In the early morning I see many people riding their bikes to exercise.

The original has sentence fragmentation and an unnecessary question mark. I fixed sentence structure by combining and rephrasing: 'many people riding their bikes' is the correct noun phrase, and 'to exercise' clearly states the purpose. Also use plural 'bikes' to agree with 'many people'. Remove filler 'Uh' and replace the question mark with a period. Suggestions: avoid fragmented sentences, ensure punctuation matches sentence type, and maintain number agreement between subjects and nouns.