Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and tense consistency, be concise, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Correct verb tenses (use past tense for past events), fix word choice (writing → riding), and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “and”, “because”, “so”). Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. My father gave me a blue bicycle for my 12th birthday, and I loved it. I enjoyed riding it around the neighborhood because I could feel the breeze and it made me feel free.

제안: Make a clear direct statement first, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Fix repetition and incomplete sentence. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “infrastructure,” “traffic”). Keep to 2–3 sentences and finish your thought.

예시: Not really. Bikes are uncommon because there is little cycling infrastructure, such as dedicated bike lanes, and heavy traffic makes riding unsafe. As a result, most people prefer other modes of transport like cars or buses.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child my dad gave me when I was around 12 years old as a birthday present and I really enjoy writing it since it is in my favorite colour which is blue and I was able to feel the breeze when I'm riding the bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad gave it to me as a birthday present when I was around 12 years old, and I really enjoyed riding it because it was my favorite color, blue, and I could feel the breeze when I rode the bike.

Multiple tense inconsistencies: the sentence mixes present and past tense (e.g., 'do have' with 'when I was a child', 'enjoy' with past events, 'I'm riding' with past context). Use past tense for past events. Also fixed word choice ('writing' -> 'riding') and split into clearer sentences. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in past tense when referring to past experiences (had, gave, enjoyed, could feel, rode).

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child my dad gave me when I was around 12 years old as a birthday present and I really enjoy writing it since it is in my favorite colour which is blue and I was able to feel the breeze when I'm riding the bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad gave it to me as a birthday present when I was around 12 years old, and I really enjoyed riding it because it was my favorite color, blue, and I could feel the breeze when I rode the bike.

Pronoun use: 'gave me' is okay but later 'it is in my favorite colour' should agree with past context ('it was my favorite color'). Also 'it' referenced awkwardly; using 'gave it to me' clarifies the object. Suggestion: ensure pronouns match tense and clearly refer to the correct noun.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child my dad gave me when I was around 12 years old as a birthday present and I really enjoy writing it since it is in my favorite colour which is blue and I was able to feel the breeze when I'm riding the bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad gave it to me as a birthday present when I was around 12 years old, and I really enjoyed riding it because it was my favorite color, blue, and I could feel the breeze when I rode the bike.

Incorrect gerund/participle: 'writing' is a typographical error and should be 'riding'. Also 'I'm riding' mixes present progressive with past narrative; use the past - 'I rode'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms and maintain consistent tense for -ing forms in narratives.

× It's not really popular and well used in my country since there aren't any specific biking roads and lanes for us to use it. So it it is quite dangerous to just ride a bike in the road as there's a lot of cars passing through and in my.

✓ Bicycles are not very popular or widely used in my country because there aren't any specific bike roads or lanes for us to use. So it is quite dangerous to ride a bike on the road, as many cars pass through.

Tense and form: 'It's not really popular and well used' is awkward; use present simple for general statements ('are not very popular or widely used'). Removed redundant 'it' and fixed 'in the road' to 'on the road'. Also removed unfinished fragment 'and in my.' Suggestion: use clear present simple for general facts and correct prepositions ('on the road').

× It's not really popular and well used in my country since there aren't any specific biking roads and lanes for us to use it. So it it is quite dangerous to just ride a bike in the road as there's a lot of cars passing through and in my.

✓ Bicycles are not very popular or widely used in my country because there aren't any specific bike roads or lanes for us to use. So it is quite dangerous to ride a bike on the road, as many cars pass through.

Preposition errors: 'in my country' is acceptable but 'in the road' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'on the road'. Also 'use it' is unnecessary after 'lanes for us to use.' Suggestion: use 'on the road' for vehicles and omit redundant pronouns.