Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, coherence and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, correct tense and ages, and avoid filler phrases and questions to the examiner. Use one or two supporting details (colour, when you got it, a simple memory) linked with a connective. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven — it was a red bike and I loved it. I remember learning to ride it in the park near my house, and I practiced every evening until I felt confident.

제안: Focus on clearer sentence structure, correct grammar and specific reasons. State your opinion directly, then give two concise, linked reasons with examples or comparisons. Avoid hesitation and repetitive fillers. Use correct verb forms and plural/singular agreement.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in Thailand. Firstly, many children learn to ride at a young age, so cycling is a common childhood activity. Secondly, bikes are affordable and practical for short trips in cities, which makes them a popular choice for students and commuters.

× I remembered I have a bike when I was 17, when I was seven years old.

✓ I remember I had a bike when I was seven years old.

The student used 'remembered' (past) then 'have' (present) and included incorrect age '17' before 'seven'. The correct sequence uses 'remember' (present) when recounting a memory or 'remembered' with past context; here use simple past 'remember' or 'remembered' consistently and 'had' for possession in the past. Also remove the incorrect '17'. Suggestion: use 'I remember I had a bike when I was seven.' or 'I remembered that I had a bike when I was seven.'

× It's what, a red bike?

✓ It was a red bike.

The student used 'It's what, a red bike?' which mixes present 'it's' and an informal filler 'what' and is ungrammatical. When speaking about a past object, use past tense 'was'. Suggestion: say 'It was a red bike.'

× And it's pretty cool.

✓ And it was pretty cool.

The sentence refers to the bike in the past, so the pronoun 'it' should be paired with past tense 'was' instead of present 'is'. Use 'it was' to match the time frame.

× It's just like my first bike and I remember I did it very well.

✓ It was my first bike and I remember I rode it very well.

The phrase 'I did it very well' is vague and ungrammatical for riding a bike. Use the verb 'rode' (past of 'ride') to describe past ability. Also change 'It's' to 'It was' to match past context. Suggestion: 'It was my first bike and I remember I rode it very well.'

× I, I think is it popular because I think more students have they buy, you know, it's, it's like a kind of popular activity when you was a kid

✓ I think it is popular because many students have one, they buy them, you know; it's like a popular activity when you were a kid.

This sentence has multiple problems: incorrect word order 'I think is it popular' should be 'I think it is popular' (subject-verb order), incorrect pronoun use 'they buy' and unclear noun 'have they buy'. Also 'you was a kid' uses wrong verb form 'was' with 'you' (should be 'were'). Use 'many students' for plural quantifier and 'them' to refer back to 'bikes'. Suggestion: 'I think it is popular because many students have bikes and they buy them; it's a popular activity when you were a kid.'

× and I think everyone can ride by too.

✓ and I think everyone can ride one too.

The phrase 'ride by' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'ride one' (ride a bike). Also ensure 'everyone' (singular) pairs with modal 'can' correctly; 'can ride one' is appropriate. Suggestion: '...everyone can ride one too.'

× So of course it is popular in Thailand.

✓ So of course it was popular in Thailand.

Context refers to childhood and past situations; to be consistent, use past tense 'was' rather than present 'is'. If the student means generally true now, 'is' would be fine, but given the previous past-tense context, change to 'was'. Suggestion: decide whether speaking about now or past and keep tense consistent: 'it was popular' (past) or 'it is popular' (present).