Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, accurate and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child.”), avoid irrelevant or incorrect words ("bark" -> "bike", "write" is wrong in this context), and keep to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, "but", "so", "however") and give a brief specific detail: who you cycled with, how often, and why you enjoyed it. Pronunciation and sentence completeness should be improved.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I loved cycling with my friends for fun and relaxation whenever we had free time. My parents couldn’t buy one for me then, so I usually played with dolls and toys instead.

제안: Good main idea but make the answer more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific example using linking words ("however", "for example", "but"). Avoid hesitations and incomplete fragments (remove "in if you go for a walk around"). Be specific about who cycles, when and why to add content depth. Keep within 2–4 sentences.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country overall. However, cycling is common in some situations; for example, if you visit local parks at around 6:00 AM you will often see older and middle-aged people riding bikes to keep fit.

× No, I didn't have a bark when I was child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'bark' instead of the correct noun 'bike' (word choice error) and omitted the article 'a' before 'child.' Correct phrase is 'a child.' Suggestion: use the correct vocabulary 'bike' and include the indefinite article with singular countable nouns: 'a child.'

× Uh, I didn't know how to write either.

✓ Uh, I didn't know how to write either when I was a child.

The sentence is grammatically correct by itself but lacks the time reference present in the question context. Adding 'when I was a child' clarifies timing and matches the question. Suggestion: include time phrases when referring to past stages of life.

× Although I really love it, uh, cycling with my friends for fun and to relax instead of I usually with uh, my dolls and toys.

✓ Although I really loved it, I usually cycled with my friends for fun and to relax instead of playing with my dolls and toys.

Multiple errors: tense inconsistency (question asked about childhood, so use past 'loved' and 'cycled'), wrong word order ('I usually cycled' rather than 'I usually with'), and missing verb for 'play' with dolls and toys. Suggestion: maintain past tense when describing past habits, place adverbs like 'usually' before the main verb, and include the correct verb 'play' for activities with dolls.

× My parents couldn't.

✓ My parents couldn't afford one.

The fragment 'My parents couldn't.' is incomplete and unclear. It requires an object or infinitive to complete the meaning, for example 'couldn't afford one' to explain why the student didn't have a bike. Suggestion: complete the clause by adding the verb and object that express the intended limitation.

× I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country.

✓ I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country.

This sentence is correct. No change needed. It correctly uses present simple to express a general opinion. Suggestion: none.

× Cycling is relatively uncommon except in certain places.

✓ Cycling is relatively uncommon except in certain places.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriately uses present simple. Suggestion: none.

× For example in if you go for a walk around.

✓ For example, if you go for a walk in the park around 6:00 AM,

The original fragment is ungrammatical and redundant ('in if'). It needs restructuring and placement of the location. Suggestion: remove the extraneous word and specify the location: 'if you go for a walk in the park around 6:00 AM,' to lead into the next clause.

× If you go for a walk to park around 6:00 AM, you often see older and middle-aged people riding bikes to balance their health or like that.

✓ If you go for a walk in the park around 6:00 AM, you often see older and middle-aged people riding bikes to improve their health.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'to park' should be 'in the park'; awkward phrase 'to balance their health or like that' is unidiomatic. Use 'improve their health' or 'for their health' instead. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for places ('in the park') and prefer natural phrases like 'to improve their health' or 'for their health.'