Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar and finish your thought. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and redundancies.

예시: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child. My father bought it for me when I was in sixth grade, and it was bright red, which I loved because red has always been my favorite color. I used it to ride to friends' houses and for exercise.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples. Use linking words for coherence and avoid repetition. Correct minor grammar issues (e.g., plural/singular, remove repeated words).

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many adults use them for short commutes because they are inexpensive and convenient, and children often rely on bikes since they cannot ride motorcycles. As a result, bicycles remain a common sight in both cities and villages.

× Yes. I had a bicycle when I was child umm, I don't remember exactly when I had that, but I think when I was in 6th standard, my dad bought it for me.

✓ Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. I don't remember exactly when I got it, but I think my dad bought it for me when I was in 6th standard.

The original sentence omits the article 'a' before 'child' and mixes clauses awkwardly. Use 'a child' for correct noun phrase. 'Had that' is informal and vague; 'got it' or 'bought it' is clearer. Keep past tense consistent: 'had' and 'bought' are correct; reorder for clarity and natural English. Suggestion: include the article 'a' and split into two sentences for clarity, and use 'got it' or 'bought it' instead of 'had that'.

× It was my first bicycle and uh, I remember it being red color and red is one of my favorite color.

✓ It was my first bicycle and I remember it being red in color, and red is one of my favorite colors.

'Red color' is awkward; use 'red in color' or just 'red'. Also 'one of my favorite color' needs plural 'colors' because 'one of' refers to members of a group. Suggestion: say 'I remember it being red' or 'red in color', and use 'colors' after 'one of my favorite'.

× Actually it's my favorite color, but uh, I don't think I.

✓ Actually it's my favorite color, but I don't think I still do.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'still do' completes the thought meaning the speaker is unsure if it remains their favorite. Maintain present tense 'don't think' and complete the clause with a verb phrase.

× Yeah, bikes are really popular in my country, even for adults.

✓ Yeah, bikes are really popular in my country, even among adults.

Use the preposition 'among' to indicate prevalence within a group. 'For adults' is understandable but 'among adults' is more natural when discussing popularity within a population.

× There are many people who use bikes even now.

✓ There are still many people who use bikes now.

Word order and adverb choice: 'even now' is awkward; 'still' or 'even now' can be used but 'still many people' is more natural. Placing 'now' after 'use bikes' reads more smoothly. Suggestion: 'There are still many people who use bikes.'

× And in childhood that's the only means of transport a kid can use, because of course we we can't use motorcycle or any of that those sort of transportation.

✓ In childhood, that's often the only means of transport a child can use, because of course we can't use motorcycles or that sort of transportation.

Issues: duplicate 'we we' is a repetition error. 'A kid' is informal; 'a child' matches 'in childhood'. 'Motorcycle' should be plural 'motorcycles' when speaking generally. 'Any of that those sort of transportation' is ungrammatical; use 'that sort of transportation' or 'those sorts of transportation'. Suggestion: remove duplication, use consistent nouns and plural where generalizing, and simplify the phrase.