Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable and directly responds, but it's brief and contains fillers (“Umm”) and a grammatical issue (“could not remember” should be “couldn’t remember” or “I can’t remember”) and an imprecise phrase (“too many years ago”). Improve by using one clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and remove fillers. Also vary vocabulary slightly and correct tense/word choice.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I remember riding it around my neighborhood with my friends after school; it was a small red bike with training wheels at first, and later I upgraded to a blue one. Those memories are a bit hazy now because it was many years ago, but I clearly recall how excited I felt when I learned to ride without training wheels.

제안: Good direct answer and useful contrast between city types, but reduce fillers (“umm”), tighten grammar, and add a linking word to make the comparison smoother. Provide one or two specific reasons or examples (e.g., infrastructure, terrain, public transport) to support the claim. Keep within five sentences.

예시: I think bike popularity in China varies by city. For example, in flat, densely populated cities like Shanghai and Beijing, cycling is common because there are bike lanes and it’s often faster than driving; however, in mountainous regions such as Guizhou and Chongqing, people use bikes less due to steep terrain and limited cycling infrastructure.

× Umm, but I could not remember what it looks like because it was too many years ago.

✓ Umm, but I could not remember what it looked like because it was too many years ago.

The student is describing a past situation, so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Looks' is present tense; it should be 'looked' to match 'could not remember' and 'was'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently when referring to past events. (English (China))

× Since I'm from China, umm this is.

✓ Since I'm from China, umm, this depends.

'This is' is incomplete and unnatural in this context. The student likely intended to introduce a general statement about variation; 'this depends' or 'it depends' is a better choice. Also add a comma after 'umm' for natural pauses. Suggestion: use complete clauses like 'it depends' to express variability. (English (China))

× This varies from different cities.

✓ This varies between different cities.

Use 'vary between' or 'vary among' rather than 'vary from' when comparing items or places. 'Vary from different cities' is unidiomatic. Suggestion: say 'varies between different cities' or simply 'varies by city.' (English (China))

× Umm for cities like Shanghai and Beijing, bikes are popular, but for mountainous cities like Guizhou and Chongqing, bikes are less popular.

✓ Umm, in cities like Shanghai and Beijing, bikes are popular, but in mountainous places like Guizhou and Chongqing, bikes are less popular.

Use parallel prepositional phrases for clarity: 'in cities like...' and 'in mountainous places like...'. 'For cities' is acceptable but 'in' is more natural here. Also 'mountainous cities like Guizhou and Chongqing' is awkward because Guizhou is a province; 'mountainous places' or 'mountainous regions' is clearer. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and accurate geographic terms. (English (China))