Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, grammatical and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and pronoun use, remove fillers and unclear phrases (e.g., "I've so"). Also explain briefly why your parents couldn't buy one using clear phrasing (e.g., "they were busy and money was tight"). Keep to under five sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I always dreamed of having one because I loved watching other children ride, but my parents were very busy with work and money was tight, so they couldn't afford to buy me one. As a result, I usually walked to school or used public transport.

제안: Answer directly and provide specific reasons and examples with correct vocabulary. Fix unclear words ("con"), avoid excessive fillers like "like," and use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Explain how bikes help (e.g., save time, cut costs, avoid traffic) and give a short example or statistic if possible. Keep it to three sentences max.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and practical for short commutes. For example, many people cycle to work to avoid traffic jams and save on transport costs. As a result, you can see bicycles parked outside offices and stations throughout the day.

× Well, unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I although I always dreamed about having a bike because when I see someone else riding on a bike, I've so and I'm so angry about this. But my parents, it was a little bit busy about work at that time and our budget a little bit.

✓ Well, unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Although I always dreamed about having one because when I saw someone else riding a bike, I felt upset and angry. But my parents were a bit busy with work at that time and our budget was limited.

Multiple sentence structure issues: misplaced conjunction 'I although' should start the clause with 'Although'; tense inconsistency between 'see' and past context requires past tense 'saw'; 'I've so' is ungrammatical and should be 'I felt upset and angry' to express emotion; 'my parents, it was a little bit busy about work' is incorrect structure — use 'my parents were a bit busy with work'; 'our budget a little bit' is incomplete — use 'our budget was limited'. Suggestions: reorder clauses to form complete sentences, maintain consistent past tense for childhood narrative, replace fragmented phrases with full verbs and clear subjects."},{