Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate, coherent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike as a child.”), correct verb tense (use past: owned, rode), and avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases (“my parents told me when I was 6” is vague). Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) and keep responses under five sentences. Also fix grammar (plural/singular, articles, prepositions) and time expressions.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I owned a simple blue bicycle and I rode it around our neighborhood every afternoon after school. Because I enjoyed fresh air and freedom, I often cycled to the nearby park with a friend at the weekend. Those rides helped me become confident and fit.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then add specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (plural and article): say “mini bikes” or “bicycles” and provide reasons, comparisons or examples to support your view. Use one or two linking words like “because” or “for example” to make your answer coherent and include concrete facts or observations to sound convincing.

예시: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, students and office workers often ride small folding bikes to avoid traffic, and local governments have built many bike lanes to encourage cycling.

× Yes I did, I own a simple ride bike which I used to ride around the neighborhood every afternoon.

✓ Yes, I did. I owned a simple bicycle which I used to ride around the neighborhood every afternoon.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly: 'Yes I did' and 'I own' conflict. Use past tense 'owned' to match the time frame 'when you were a child' and 'used to ride'. Also 'ride bike' is nonstandard; use 'bicycle'. Add punctuation and a comma after 'Yes'. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent for past situations (e.g., 'I owned'). Also use correct noun 'bicycle' or 'bike'.

× My parents told me when I was 6.

✓ My parents gave it to me when I was six.

The original sentence 'My parents told me when I was 6' is incomplete or incorrect in meaning: 'told me' requires an object or content of what was told, and does not convey gifting a bike. Likely intended meaning is that parents gave the bike at age six. Use 'gave it to me' and write out 'six'. Suggestion: Ensure verbs match intended action; include necessary objects for verbs like 'tell' or use a different verb for giving.

× I especially like riding to the pub park with my friend on weekend.

✓ I especially liked riding to the public park with my friend on weekends.

Preposition and article use are incorrect: 'to the pub park' is wrong—use 'public park' or 'the park'. 'On weekend' should be 'on weekends' or 'at the weekend'. Also maintain past tense 'liked' to match childhood context. Use plural 'friend' consistency: 'with my friend' is fine. Suggestion: Use correct nouns ('public park' or 'park') and correct time expressions ('on weekends' or 'at the weekend'). Keep tense consistent.

× Yes, mini bike are popular in our country.

✓ Yes, minibikes are popular in our country.

Subject and noun form are incorrect: 'mini bike' should be plural 'minibikes' to agree with plural verb 'are'. Also 'mini bike' is usually written as one word 'minibike' or 'small bikes'. Ensure noun and verb number agree. Suggestion: Match singular/plural forms ('minibikes are' or 'mini bikes are').