Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, directly answer, and give clear supporting details using correct grammar and relevant vocabulary. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and unrelated phrases (e.g., “mouse,” “Europe record”). Use a topic sentence, then 1–2 specific supporting details linked logically. Also correct tense and time expressions (e.g., after school at about 5:00 PM).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it with my friends after school, usually around 5:00 PM, and we would explore the neighborhood or race along the park paths.

제안: Answer directly (Yes/No/Partly) and give clear, specific reasons with linking words (because, however, for example). Use appropriate vocabulary to describe climate and infrastructure (hot summers, lack of bike lanes). Avoid hesitations and incomplete phrases. Keep answer to no more than 4–5 concise sentences.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because our cities lack safe bike lanes and traffic can be dangerous. In addition, summers are very hot, which discourages many people from cycling regularly.

× Of course I had a bike when I was a child. Uh, we uh, always playing with the mouse playing after uh, my school uh, finish, uh, uh, about uh, uh, 5:00 AM and Europe record.

✓ Of course I had a bike when I was a child. We always played with the bike after my school finished, around 5:00 PM in the evening.

The sentence contains several past tense errors and sentence structure problems. 'Always playing' should be the past simple 'always played' to match the past time frame 'when I was a child.' 'My school finish' should be 'my school finished' to use past tense. 'About 5:00 AM and Europe record' is unclear and likely meant 'around 5:00 PM in the evening'; clarify time phrase and use 'around' for approximation. Improve cohesion by removing filler words (uh) and combining clauses correctly. Suggestions: Use past simple consistently for past events, remove fillers, and use clear time expressions ('around 5:00 PM').

× I believe, uh, no, uh, the bike card didn't survive, uh, on my country, uh, because, uh, that people, uh, feel difficult to drive the bikes, uh, especially.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because people find it difficult to ride them, especially.

Multiple tense and verb form problems: 'I believe, no' is awkward; use 'I don't think' for negative belief in present. 'The bike card didn't survive' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'bikes are not popular' or 'the bike culture didn't survive.' 'Didn't survive' is past tense but the general statement about popularity should be in present ('are not popular'). 'On my country' should be 'in my country' (preposition error). 'Feel difficult to drive the bikes' is wrong: use 'find it difficult to ride bikes' — 'find' with object 'it' + adjective 'difficult' and 'ride' for bicycles rather than 'drive'. Remove fillers and 'especially' should attach to what follows or be placed before the aspect being emphasized. Suggestions: Use present simple for general facts, correct preposition 'in', use 'find it difficult to ride' for idiomatic expression.

× And that summer, uh, there were uh, uh, more hot and umm, yeah, the degrees.

✓ That summer it was much hotter and the temperature was higher.

This sentence has awkward comparative and tense usage. 'There were more hot' is ungrammatical; use 'it was much hotter' to compare temperature. 'The degrees' is vague; better to say 'the temperature was higher' or specify degrees. Keep past simple ('was') to describe past weather. Remove fillers and use an adjective/adverb correctly to form comparative ('hotter', 'much hotter'). Suggestions: Use 'it was hotter' or 'the temperature was higher' for clarity and correct comparative form.