Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: The answer begins with a direct response but contains several irrelevant or incorrect details (e.g. “bought meat” and “taught me how to write”) that reduce clarity and naturalness. To improve: (1) Stay on topic — focus on the bicycle and learning to ride. (2) Use a clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details (who, when, where, and how you learned). (3) Keep answers concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences) and use simple linking words (for example, because, so, then) to make the story coherent. (4) Use relevant vocabulary (ride, pedals, balance, practice, confident) instead of unrelated verbs.

예시: Yes — I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought it for me and taught me how to ride, and we practised in the park every weekend. After a few weeks I felt much more confident and could cycle on my own.

제안: This is a clear, well-structured answer: direct topic sentence followed by specific reasons and an example. To improve further: (1) Add one brief contrasting detail or comparison to deepen the response (e.g. mention a group who do cycle or a recent change). (2) Use a connecting phrase to introduce the contrast (however, on the other hand). (3) Vary vocabulary slightly (commute, recreational, popular, commonplace). Keep it concise and natural.

예시: No, bicycles are not very popular in Hong Kong because our public transport system is so efficient that most people commute by MTR, bus or taxi. However, cycling is fairly common as a recreational activity in parks and on outlying islands, and a growing number of people cycle on weekends for exercise.

× 'My father bought meat for me and taught me how to write because he thought everyone should learn that skill, and we spent several weekends practicing in the park until I felt confident.'

✓ 'My father bought me a bicycle and taught me how to ride because he thought everyone should learn that skill, and we spent several weekends practicing in the park until I felt confident.'

'bought meat for me' is incorrect in context; the student meant a bicycle. The verb pattern "buy someone something" is idiomatic in English, so "bought me a bicycle" is correct. Also "taught me how to write" does not match learning to use a bicycle; the correct verb is "ride". Suggestion: check that objects and verbs match the intended meaning and use the "buy someone something" structure.'},{