Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct vocabulary and grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus supporting details. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and incorrect words (‘wrote’ should be ‘rode’, ‘available memory’ unclear). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'and', 'so', 'because'). Aim for 2–4 sentences: state that you had a bike, describe it briefly, and add one specific memory or reason why it was special.

예시: Yes—I had a bright red bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day until the chain broke, and I loved how fast it made me feel. Because I learned to ride on that bike, it is one of my clearest childhood memories.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then support with specific reasons and examples. Fix grammar and word choice errors (e.g., 'shared by a' and 'it was real' are incorrect). Use linking words (for example, 'because', 'for instance', 'so') and provide a concrete example such as commuting, exercise, or affordability. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For instance, many people use bicycles to commute to work or go to the market, especially in crowded cities where traffic is heavy.

× Yes, of course. Umm, it was a red 1. Umm, I really liked it. I wrote it almost every day, umm, until it was broken. So I think in my childhood it was really available memory.

✓ Yes, of course. Umm, it was a red one. Umm, I really liked it. I rode it almost every day, umm, until it was broken. So I think from my childhood it was a very vivid memory.

Multiple issues: '1' is a typographical error; use 'one' (word) (issue falls under sentence structure/word form). 'I wrote it' is incorrect verb choice; the intended action is riding a bike, so use the past tense verb 'rode' (Past tense issue ID 5). 'From my childhood' is the correct prepositional phrase rather than 'in my childhood' when referring to a period spanning memory (Incorrect use of prepositions ID 11). 'Really available memory' is incorrect collocation; use 'very vivid memory' or 'a fond memory' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs ID 13). Suggestions: replace numeral with word 'one', change 'wrote' to 'rode' and keep past simple for completed habitual action, use 'from my childhood' and choose appropriate adjective 'vivid' or 'fond'.

× Yes, of course. You know, a in my country shared by a really popular among everyone because it was real. It's really convenient for people to know to travel whatever they want to.

✓ Yes, of course. You know, in my country bicycles are really popular among everyone because they are affordable. They're really convenient for people to travel wherever they want to.

Errors present: extraneous article 'a' and misplaced words cause sentence structure problems (Sentence structure errors ID 26 and Article errors ID 22). 'shared by' is incorrect here; the intended passive or active form is 'are popular' (Subject-verb agreement / incorrect structure, ID 27 and 26). 'It was real' is wrong word choice; likely meant 'affordable' or 'common' (Incorrect use of adjectives ID 13). 'It's really convenient for people to know to travel' contains unnecessary 'to know' and incorrect infinitive sequence; correct is 'convenient for people to travel' (Verb form/structure ID 26 and Verb + -ing form ID 8). 'Whatever they want to' should be 'wherever they want to' to indicate places (Incorrect comparison/object or word choice ID 19). Suggestions: remove extraneous article, use plural subject 'bicycles' or 'they' with 'are popular', replace 'real' with 'affordable' or 'common', delete 'to know', and use 'wherever' for location.