Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No), then add 1–2 brief supporting details (when you got it, how often you rode it, a short memory). Avoid repeating the examiner's question and conflicting answers. Use linking words (for example, and/so/because) to make it coherent.

예시: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was eight and rode it to school most days. Because my neighborhood was quiet and safe, I spent hours exploring with my friends, which helped me become more confident and independent.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence (Yes/No/Not really), then support it with 2 specific reasons or an example. Use linking words (because/so/for example) to connect ideas and avoid filler words like “mmm.” Try to replace vague phrasing with concrete facts or observations (e.g., traffic patterns, weather, availability of bike lanes).

예시: Not really. Most people prefer motorcycles and cars because they are faster and better suited to long commutes, especially in hot weather. For example, in my city there are few dedicated bike lanes, so cycling feels unsafe and inconvenient for daily travel.

× MMM, come to think of it, not really because people are now relying on motor motorcycles and use of motorcycles as a mode of transportation rather than bikes.

✓ Mm, come to think of it, not really, because people now rely on motorcycles and use them as a mode of transportation rather than bikes.

Errors: redundant phrasing and incorrect verb form. 'are now relying' is a present continuous form that can be acceptable, but in general statements about trends use simple present 'rely'. 'motor motorcycles' is redundant; use 'motorcycles'. Also the sentence repeats 'motorcycles' and lacks a clear pronoun for the second reference; replace with 'them'. Suggestion: use simple present for general facts, avoid redundant words, and use pronouns to avoid repetition.