Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct, clear response first, then add one or two concise supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words. Mention a simple reason and, if relevant, a brief example or consequence. Use linking words (for example, because, so, therefore) to connect ideas and keep sentences short (no more than 3–4).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I was too young. For example, my parents thought it was unsafe, so they waited until I was older to teach me how to ride.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give specific supporting details and a brief reason. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'motorbikes' or 'scooters' rather than repeating 'bike') and avoid hesitation. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'for example' to make your point logical and concise.

예시: Yes, motorbikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient in traffic. For example, many young people ride Honda scooters to go to school or meet friends in the city.

× Uh, actually I have when, when I was child, I had, I had no, no bike because I was so young.

✓ Uh, actually I didn't. When I was a child, I had no bike because I was very young.

The original mixes present tense 'have' with past context and has disfluent fragments. This is a sentence structure error: the main clause should be past tense to match 'when I was a child'. Use 'I didn't' or 'I didn't have one' for negative past, and 'very young' is the correct adjective phrase. Suggestion: plan a clear simple past sentence: 'When I was a child, I didn't have a bike because I was very young.'

× Uh, maximum, uh, accident, uh, accident will be, will hot, uh, bike accident.

✓ At most, I was afraid of bike accidents.

The original is ungrammatical and fragmented. It attempts to express a fear of accidents but uses incorrect word order and nonstandard words ('will hot'). This is a sentence structure error. Use a concise past-tense statement that fits the context: 'I was afraid of bike accidents' or 'I worried about bike accidents.'

× Oh my God, I can't.

✓ Oh my God, I can't imagine that.

The original fragment 'I can't' is incomplete and unclear. This is a sentence structure error — the verb needs an object or complement. Add an appropriate verb phrase to complete the thought, e.g., 'I can't imagine that' or 'I couldn't.'

× Yes, I think bike bikes are popular in our in our country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country.

The original repeats words and uses singular/plural inconsistently. This is a singular/plural issue: use the plural 'bikes' when speaking generally about the category. Also remove duplicate words for clarity.

× Uh, a Honda Honda van is a most popular in our country.

✓ Honda vans are very popular in our country.

The original repeats 'Honda' and uses incorrect article 'a' and 'is a most popular'. This is a sentence structure error combined with article misuse. Use plural 'Honda vans' for general statement and 'very popular' or 'the most popular' depending on meaning. If you mean the single most popular model, say 'the most popular vehicle.'

× Most of most of boys uh use Honda uh for outing or I can't explain, sorry.

✓ Most boys use Hondas for outings. Sorry, I can't explain well.

The original repeats 'most of' and has awkward phrasing. This is a sentence structure error. Use 'Most boys' (no double 'most of') and plural 'Hondas' to indicate the vehicles they use, and 'for outings' is the correct phrase. End with a clear apology phrase if needed.