Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は基本的に明確で自然ですが、いくつかの文法的誤りと語彙の選択ミス（“wrote it to everywhere”など）があります。また、情報の繰り返しがあり、文を簡潔にまとめることでより効果的になります。改善点は：1) 主題文を明確にし、2) 適切な動詞（ride, goなど）を使う、3) 詳細を付ける際に接続語（for example, after that, so）を使って論理をつなぐ、4) 文の数を3〜4文に収めることです。具体的には、“I received my first bike as a Christmas gift when I was about ten. After that, I rode it everywhere — to the supermarket and to school.”のように表現すると良いでしょう。

예시: I received my first bike as a Christmas gift when I was about ten. After that, I rode it everywhere — to the supermarket and to school. I remember feeling very proud because it gave me more freedom to visit my friends and run small errands.

제안: 内容は分かりやすいですが、語順や語彙の選択に改善の余地があります（“popular transportation”より “a popular mode of transport”、“do not have license”より “don’t have a driver’s license”など）。また、理由を述べる際に具体例や比較を加えると説得力が増します。接続語（for example, furthermore, therefore）を用いて理由を整理し、文を3〜4文にまとめて簡潔に述べてください。

예시: Yes, bikes are a very popular mode of transport in my country. For example, many children ride bikes to school or to cram school, and older people or those without a driver’s license often use bikes for short trips. Because bikes are affordable and convenient in crowded neighborhoods, they remain a common choice for daily travel.

× And after I got the bike for my Christmas present, I wrote it to everywhere.

✓ And after I got the bike for my Christmas present, I rode it everywhere.

The student used 'wrote' incorrectly; the intended verb is 'ride' in the past tense 'rode' (action of using a bike). 'Wrote' is the past of 'write' and doesn't fit. Use 'rode' for completed past action. Suggestion: learn common verb pairs and choose verbs by meaning (ride = use a bike).

× I wrote it to the supermarket, to my school.

✓ I rode it to the supermarket and to my school.

Preposition 'to' is fine but the main issue is the verb 'wrote'. After correcting to 'rode', join items with 'and' for natural listing. Also keep 'to' before places. Suggestion: use 'rode it to X and to Y' or 'rode it to X, Y, and Z'.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country? Student: Yes, I do believe that bikes are a popular transportation in my country because a lot of children use bikes to go to the cram school or their school or to their grandparents house.

✓ Yes, I do believe that bikes are a popular means of transportation in my country because a lot of children use bikes to go to cram school, to their school, or to their grandparents' house.

'a popular transportation' is unidiomatic; use 'a popular means of transportation' or 'popular for transportation'. 'the cram school' is incorrect in general; use 'cram school' or 'the cram school' depending on context. Also possessive for 'grandparents' house' needs an apostrophe. Suggestion: use 'means of transportation' and correct possessives and list punctuation.

× And not just children, a lot of adults who do not have license use bikes.

✓ And not just children; a lot of adults who do not have a license use bikes.

Missing article before 'license' — should be 'a license'. Also punctuation: use semicolon or conjunction. Suggestion: include appropriate articles with singular countable nouns ('a license').

× So I do think that it is possible.

✓ So I do think that bikes are a possible option for transportation.

'It is possible' is vague and doesn't clearly refer to the idea asked (popularity/use of bikes). Improve clarity by explicitly mentioning 'bikes' and 'option for transportation'. Suggestion: make the subject explicit to avoid ambiguity.