Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct tense and natural phrasing, and add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give a specific memory and a linking phrase to expand. Avoid repetition and grammar errors (e.g., use 'had' not 'have', 'red' before 'bicycle', and 'roamed' instead of 'roam').

예시: I did — I had a red bicycle that my parents gave me for my ninth birthday. It was my favorite toy, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon after school. Because the streets were quiet, I often explored nearby parks and made friends with other children who rode there.

제안: Give a clear opinion, support it with two specific, coherent reasons using correct vocabulary and linking words. Use accurate collocations (e.g., 'bike lanes', 'cheaper than cars'), correct grammar (e.g., 'the government has built' or 'the government constructed'), and avoid awkward phrases like 'gourmet created.'

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular. One reason is that the government has built many safe bike lanes in cities, which makes cycling convenient and safe. Another reason is cost—bikes are much cheaper to buy and maintain than cars, so many people choose them for short journeys.

× Yes, in my childhood I have a bicycle of red color which was gifted by my parents on my 9th birthday.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I had a red bicycle that was gifted to me by my parents on my ninth birthday.

The sentence mixes present perfect 'have' with a past time reference 'in my childhood' which requires simple past 'had' (issue: verb in past participle form and tense). Also 'of red color' is unnatural; use the adjective 'red' before 'bicycle'. 'Which was gifted by my parents on my 9th birthday' should be 'that was gifted to me by my parents on my ninth birthday' for correct passive voice and noun phrase clarity. Suggestion: use simple past for past time expressions and place adjectives before nouns.

× I have very much memories with that the bicycle.

✓ I have many memories with that bicycle.

'Very much memories' is incorrect: 'memories' is a countable plural noun and should use 'many' not 'much'. Also 'with that the bicycle' has an extra article; use 'that bicycle' or 'the bicycle'. Suggestion: use 'many memories' and correct article usage.

× I roam here when in my childhood.

✓ I used to roam here when I was a child.

The original mixes present 'roam' with a past time reference, creating a sentence structure error. English uses 'used to' or past simple 'roamed' with 'when I was a child'. Also 'in my childhood' is less natural than 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: use 'used to' for habitual past actions or 'I roamed here when I was a child.'

× I roam here and there with my bicycle in my free time.

✓ I used to ride my bicycle here and there in my free time.

The student uses present tense 'roam' to describe past habitual actions; use 'used to' or past simple. Also 'roam' is less natural for bicycles; 'ride my bicycle' is appropriate. Suggestion: use past habitual form 'used to' and appropriate verbs for activities.

× Yes, in my country bikes are popular because gourmet created for government constructed very much good lanes for bike users as a bike is very cheaper.

✓ Yes, in my country bikes are popular because the government has built very good lanes for cyclists and bikes are much cheaper.

This sentence has multiple structure and word choice errors: 'gourmet created for government constructed' is garbled; likely intended 'the government has constructed' (present perfect for recent past with present relevance). 'Very much good' is ungrammatical; use 'very good' or 'much better' as appropriate. 'Bike users' is better phrased 'cyclists'. 'As a bike is very cheaper' is incorrect: 'cheaper' is comparative and should use 'much cheaper' or 'cheaper than cars' with a comparison. Suggestion: choose correct verb phrase for construction, use present perfect 'has built' or simple past 'built', use 'much cheaper' and include comparison 'than cars'.

× Bike is cheaper than the car, that's why.

✓ Bikes are cheaper than cars, which is why they are popular.

Use plural nouns for general statements: 'Bikes are cheaper than cars'. Also 'that's why' is a fragment; better to link cause and effect 'which is why they are popular.' Suggestion: use plural nouns for general truths and connect sentences to show reason.