Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Make a clear direct statement, correct grammar (use past simple), and give one or two brief supporting details. Keep it natural and under 5 sentences. Use linking words if you add details (e.g., because, so, but).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. Instead, I used to walk to school and sometimes borrow a friend’s bike when I needed to go farther.

제안: Your reply is very confused and off-topic. Directly answer the question, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use clear vocabulary (e.g., ‘popular’, ‘common’, ‘used for commuting’). Organize ideas with linking words (for example, because, for instance). Avoid filler words and unrelated phrases. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many students and workers use bicycles to commute to college or nearby markets, especially in crowded cities.

× No, I had on paper when I was child because my my family had not provided me.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because my family could not afford one.

The original sentence has multiple structure and word choice errors: missing object 'bike', wrong phrase 'had on paper', missing article 'a' before 'child', repeated word 'my', and awkward passive 'had not provided me'. This fits 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26). Correction uses the correct past simple negative 'did not have' for possession in the past, includes the noun 'bike', uses the correct article 'a child', removes duplication, and replaces 'had not provided me' with the clearer 'could not afford one'. Suggestion: ensure you include the object of verbs, use correct articles with singular nouns, avoid word repetition, and use simple past constructions for past facts.

× Is 18 bucks bags are popular in my country because uh bags are uh essential for uh poor in modern life.

✓ Yes, cheap bags that cost around 18 bucks are popular in my country because bags are essential for poor people in modern life.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear: it begins with 'Is', has subject-verb confusion, lacks articles, and uses 'poor' as a noun without 'people'. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Correction changes the question-start to a statement 'Yes', clarifies '18 bucks' as a price modifier 'that cost around 18 bucks', uses 'are popular', adds 'people' after 'poor', and restores natural word order. Suggestion: decide if you are answering 'Yes/No' then follow with a full statement, place price modifiers next to the noun they describe, and use 'poor people' rather than just 'poor' when needed.

× Shell uh, for instance, umm, especially in uh on Oracle Orac or studies uh, at the college.

✓ For instance, they are especially common among students at college.

The fragment is disfluent and ungrammatical: 'Shell' is unclear, 'Oracle Orac' seems like filler, and the preposition phrase 'in on ... studies' is incorrect. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Correction provides a concise, grammatical sentence: 'For instance, they are especially common among students at college.' Suggestion: avoid fillers, choose the correct preposition 'among' for groups, and use clear nouns like 'students' and 'college' to convey meaning.