Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and complete. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (type, why it was special, a brief memory). Keep it natural and avoid hesitations or trailing off. Use up to 5 sentences and a linking word if you add details.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red mountain bike with training wheels, which made it easy for me to learn to balance. I especially liked the colorful stickers my parents put on it, and I often rode it to the park with my friends.

제안: Remove filler words and organize your answer: give a clear opinion, then support it with two specific reasons or a recent trend as evidence. Use linking words like 'however' or 'recently' to connect ideas. Be specific about who is cycling more and why.

예시: I think bikes are fairly popular but mainly among children. Traditionally, most adults preferred cars or motorcycles because fuel is inexpensive and those vehicles are convenient; however, recently more adults have started cycling for health and environmental reasons, especially in cities where bike lanes have been added.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and my bike was a type of special bike that was.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and my bike was a special type of bicycle.

The original sentence ends awkwardly with 'that was' which is incomplete and redundant. Also 'type of special bike that was' is unnatural. Use 'a special type of bicycle' or 'a special bike' and complete the clause. No past participle correction beyond removing the fragment was needed; this is a sentence structure error and redundancy. Suggestion: remove redundant words and complete the idea.

× Uh, originally uh, children use uh bikes more than adults because uh, adults prefer to use car or motorcycle due to low price of gas.

✓ Originally, children used bikes more than adults because adults preferred to use cars or motorcycles due to the low price of gas.

The examiner's question asks about general past trend; the student should use past tense to describe 'originally'. Subject-verb agreement: 'children use' should be 'children used'. Count nouns need plural: 'car or motorcycle' should be 'cars or motorcycles'. Include definite article 'the' before 'low price of gas'. Suggestion: match tense to time reference and ensure plural forms for general categories.

× But recently I see more people are using bike bikes.

✓ But recently I have seen more people using bikes.

The phrase 'recently I see' is awkward; use present perfect 'I have seen' to indicate a recent change. 'are using bike bikes' repeats 'bike' and lacks plural: use 'bikes'. Also remove unnecessary auxiliary 'are' after 'people' when using 'have seen' plus '-ing' is optional: 'have seen people using bikes' or 'more people are using bikes'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use correct plural, and choose the appropriate recent tense (present perfect) for recent observations.