Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, fluency and coherence: correct small grammar mistakes, avoid redundancy, and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (who gave it, how old you were, a short anecdote). Keep to under five sentences. Use precise verbs (e.g., “rode” instead of “writing”).

예시: Yes, I did. I received a maroon bicycle as a birthday present from my parents when I was eight. I often rode it to the park with a close friend, and we spent hours racing and exploring the paths there. That memory stands out because it was my first taste of independence.

제안: Work on grammatical accuracy, coherence and vocabulary: give a clear direct answer first, then support with specific reasons and linking words (e.g., “because,” “however,” “for example”). Correct grammar (e.g., “people usually commute,” avoid fillers like “apparently”). Be concise and avoid run-on sentences. Provide one or two concrete examples or comparisons (urban vs rural).

예시: Not very popular, I think. Because most cities have extensive public transport—buses and trains—many people commute by those means or drive cars. For example, in the capital, bike lanes are rare, so cycling is less common than in smaller towns where people might still cycle for short trips.

× Yes I did actually.

✓ Yes, I did, actually.

Comma usage: add commas for natural pause and clarity. This is not a change in verb form but improves sentence fluency; keep past tense 'did' to answer the past question.

× I received it as a birthday gift and it was in maroon colour.

✓ I received it as a birthday gift, and it was maroon in colour.

Adjective order and preposition: 'maroon' is the color adjective and should directly modify 'colour' or be followed by 'in colour'. Use 'maroon in colour' or 'maroon' alone. Also add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses.

× I remember writing it with my friend when we went to park and it was such an amazing memory.

✓ I remember riding it with my friend when we went to the park, and it was such an amazing memory.

Wrong verb: 'writing' is incorrect; context requires 'riding' for a bike. Missing article: 'the park' needs the definite article. Add comma before 'and' to link clauses. These corrections fix word choice and article use.

× I don't think so 'cause apparently in my country we have a landscape with full of public transportation such as bus or train, hence people are usually commute to the work every day using that or either owning a car.

✓ I don't think so, because in my country there is extensive public transportation, such as buses and trains, so people usually commute to work every day using it or by owning a car.

Multiple issues corrected while following allowed types: conjunction and sentence structure. Replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because'. Use 'there is' to introduce existence (There be issue) and correct noun forms: 'buses and trains' (plural). 'Landscape with full of' is incorrect; use 'extensive public transportation' or 'a well-developed public transportation system'. Remove extra articles: 'commute to work' not 'to the work'. Use 'using it' (referring to public transportation) or 'by owning a car'. These changes fix conjunctions, article use, plurality, and verb forms to make the sentence grammatical and natural.