Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct tense and concise phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I did") and add one or two brief supporting details using correct grammar. Avoid redundant phrases like "if I could remember" and "way back then."

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was about seven, and I used to ride it to my friends' houses every weekend.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, use linking words to connect reasons, and provide a specific example. Fix grammar (article use, word order) and avoid repetition. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and be specific about who uses bikes and why.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because traffic is often heavy, so many young people choose bicycles as a faster and cheaper way to commute. For example, college students often cycle to campus to avoid long delays on the road.

× Yes, I have a bike, if I could remember since I was a child way back then.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student mixes present perfect ('have') with a past time reference ('since I was a child') and adds unnecessary conditional 'if I could remember'. Use simple past 'had' to match the past time frame 'when I was a child'. Remove 'if I could remember' and 'way back then' because they are redundant. Suggestion: Use simple, direct past tense for past possessions: 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Yes, in our country the Philippines bike is most needed mostly for the youth.

✓ Yes, in our country, the Philippines, bikes are most needed, especially by young people.

Problems: missing commas around the country name 'the Philippines', incorrect singular 'bike' instead of plural 'bikes' when speaking generally, awkward phrase 'most needed mostly' and unnatural 'for the youth'. Use plural 'bikes' and 'especially by young people' or 'especially among youth'. Also add commas for apposition: 'in our country, the Philippines,' and adjust word order for clarity.

× The traffic in our country is so bad it is why they use vehicles or bike for the the transportation so that we can.

✓ Traffic in our country is so bad that people use vehicles or bikes for transportation.

Errors: unnecessary 'the' before 'traffic', run-on structure 'it is why', incorrect article 'the transportation' and extra words 'so that we can' which are incomplete. Use 'so bad that' to introduce the result clause, plural 'bikes', and 'for transportation' without the definite article. The corrected sentence is concise and grammatically coherent.