Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và thứ tự từ, sử dụng thì phù hợp (quá khứ đơn) và tránh lặp từ, đồng thời làm câu rõ ràng hơn với một câu chủ đề và tối đa 2–3 câu hỗ trợ. Chú ý động từ chia (bought, wanted, didn’t remember), thay từ sai (cubby → scooter/bike), và nối ý bằng từ nối phù hợp (for example, because).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought me a small pink bike when I was five because she wanted me to have fun and not get bored. I remember enjoying riding it around our neighborhood.

제안: Cải thiện phát âm và ngữ pháp, dùng từ đúng (bike, are), chia động từ theo ngôi (people prefer), dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng (topic sentence + 1–2 câu giải thích) và tránh tiếng “uh”. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể (e.g., traffic, weather, distance) và liên kết bằng từ nối như because, so, for example.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes or cars because they are more convenient for long distances and in heavy traffic, for example when commuting to work.

× Uh, yes, my mom has bought me a pink cubby when I was five years old.

✓ Uh, yes, my mom bought me a pink cubby when I was five years old.

Use simple past rather than present perfect with a specific past time expression. In English, when a time is specified (when I was five years old), the simple past (bought) is correct; present perfect (has bought) is not used with finished time expressions.

× She want me to play with that and not feel bored when this is a memory.

✓ She wanted me to play with it so I would not feel bored and it would become a memory.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb form for third person singular and past context. 'She want' should be 'She wanted' because the action occurred in the past. Also pronoun and phrasing adjusted: 'that' -> 'it'; clarify purpose with 'so I would not' and 'it would become a memory.'

× That's when I was very small, so I'm not remember all, but I think it is very funny.

✓ That's when I was very small, so I don't remember everything, but I think it was very funny.

Use correct present simple negative 'do not remember' (I don't remember) rather than 'I'm not remember.' Also use 'everything' instead of 'all' for natural phrasing. The final clause refers to a past event so 'was' (past tense) is appropriate instead of 'is.'

× Uh, I think by is not popular in my country uh, in my country people is prefer to use uh, motorbike or car because of their convenience and this is more safer.

✓ Uh, I think bikes are not very popular in my country. People prefer to use motorbikes or cars because they are more convenient and safer.

Multiple issues: 'by' is a typo for 'bikes'; subject-verb agreement 'people is prefer' should be 'people prefer.' Use plural nouns 'motorbikes or cars.' Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer back to vehicles. Remove unnecessary 'this is' and use comparative 'more convenient and safer.' Also adjust word order for natural English.