Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (past tense), sentence variety, and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, use linking words to connect ideas, and avoid awkward word choices like "drive" for bicycles or "cherished" in this context. Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and add one specific detail (e.g., how you felt or a short memory) to enrich the response.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was six my father bought me a pink tricycle, and I used to ride it with my siblings in the park. At first I couldn't pedal properly, so my father patiently taught me how to balance and pedal. I remember feeling very proud when I could ride on my own.

제안: Work on accuracy, natural phrasing, and cohesion. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give brief reasons using linking words (for example, "because" and "however"). Correct articles and plural forms, avoid literal translations like "too much hot"—use "very hot" or "extremely hot." Provide one specific example or statistic if possible to strengthen the answer.

예시: Not really. In the United Arab Emirates bicycles are not very popular because the climate is extremely hot and cities are designed for cars. However, bicycles are commonly used by delivery riders and some people who cannot afford a car. For short distances in parks or on dedicated cycle paths, you do see more cyclists.

× I remember I have a pink bicycle.

✓ I remember I had a pink bicycle.

The sentence refers to a past memory, so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'had' instead of 'have' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when talking about past events.

× When I was 6 year old, my father bought that bike for me.

✓ When I was 6 years old, my father bought that bike for me.

The noun 'year' must be plural ('years') when referring to an age greater than one. Also the common expression is 'years old'. Suggestion: Use 'years' for ages over one: '6 years old'.

× It was a tricycle.

✓ It was a tricycle.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches context, so no change is needed. It correctly uses past tense to describe the bike.

× Me and my siblings went to a park and cherished it.

✓ My siblings and I went to a park and enjoyed it.

Use subject pronoun 'I' rather than object form 'me' when it is the subject. Also 'cherished' is inappropriate for enjoying an outing; 'enjoyed' is the correct verb here. Order 'My siblings and I' is more natural and polite.

× I didn't know how to drive it, so my father taught me.

✓ I didn't know how to ride it, so my father taught me.

When talking about using a bicycle, the verb 'ride' is correct rather than 'drive'. The past tense 'didn't know' and 'taught' are appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'ride a bike' in English.

× I live in Emirates, here bikes are not much popular, but most of delivery riders and people who don't have a car use that bikes.

✓ I live in the Emirates. Here, bikes are not very popular, but most delivery riders and people who don't have a car use those bikes.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'Emirates'. Use 'very popular' rather than 'not much popular'. 'Most of delivery riders' should be 'most delivery riders' or 'most of the delivery riders'. Use 'those bikes' (plural demonstrative) not 'that bikes'. Also add punctuation for clarity.

× But here in United Arab Emirates it's too much hot country, so most people do not prefer to use bikes, they prefer cars or motorcycles.

✓ But here in the United Arab Emirates it is a very hot country, so most people do not prefer to use bikes; they prefer cars or motorcycles.

Include the definite article 'the' before 'United Arab Emirates'. 'Too much hot' is incorrect; use 'very hot' or 'too hot'. 'Prefer to use bikes' is acceptable but combine clauses with appropriate punctuation (semicolon) or split into two sentences. Suggestion: Use 'very hot' and 'the United Arab Emirates'.