Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, word choice and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., 'I had a bicycle when I was a child'), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'and'). Avoid filler words and repetition. Keep it within 3–4 coherent sentences.

예시: I had a bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it with my family on weekends because we liked exploring the neighborhood together. Those rides were very fun and made me feel happy and free.

제안: Give a direct answer, then support it with clear, specific reasons and a brief comparison. Use correct words (e.g., 'private car' not 'pirate car') and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words like 'because', 'however', or 'therefore' to make a logical response.

예시: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in Thailand. People usually prefer private cars and motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for commuting. However, bicycles are common in some parks and rural areas for leisure and short trips.

× I have a buy when I was a kid.

✓ I had a bike when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present perfect 'have' with a past time expression 'when I was a kid'. Use simple past 'had' for completed past actions. Also 'buy' is incorrect word choice; 'bike' fits context. Suggestion: use 'I had a bike when I was a kid.'

× I'd really love to do a bicycle or activities with my family.

✓ I really loved riding a bicycle and doing activities with my family.

The speaker uses 'I'd really love to' (conditional/present desire) but context refers to past enjoyment. Change to past 'I really loved'. 'Do a bicycle' is ungrammatical; use 'ride a bicycle'. Also combine parallel activities with 'and'. Suggestion: say 'I really loved riding a bicycle and doing activities with my family.'

× So it's really fun and also, uh, happy, make me feel happy when I was a kid.

✓ It was really fun and made me feel happy when I was a kid.

The sentence improperly mixes present 'it's' with past time 'when I was a kid' and uses 'happy' awkwardly. Use past tense 'was' and past verb 'made' to match time. Remove redundant 'happy'. Suggestion: 'It was really fun and made me feel happy when I was a kid.'

× Because of uh, in Thailand we normally use a pirate car and motorbike because UPS is very convenient and faster than using a bicycle.

✓ In Thailand we normally use private cars and motorbikes because they are more convenient and faster than bicycles.

'Because of uh, in Thailand' is redundant; start with 'In Thailand'. 'Pirate car' is wrong word; correct is 'private car'. 'Motorbike' pluralize to 'motorbikes' to match 'cars'. 'UPS' is incorrect and unclear; replace with 'they' referring to cars and motorbikes. Use comparative 'more convenient' and 'faster than bicycles' for clarity. Suggestion: 'In Thailand we normally use private cars and motorbikes because they are more convenient and faster than bicycles.'

× So this is the.

✓ So that's the reason.

The fragment 'So this is the.' is incomplete and lacks a noun to finish the idea. Complete the thought: 'So that's the reason.' or 'So that's why.' Suggestion: finish with a noun or clause, e.g. 'So that's why.'