Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Улучшите связность и точность выражения, избавьтесь от тавтологии и ошибок в словоупотреблении. Начните с прямого ответа на вопрос, затем добавьте 1–2 уточняющих предложения с конкретными деталями (когда получили, почему он важен). Избегайте повторов (например, «used to» и затем снова «as a child»). Проверьте лексику: «conserved» и «stays at the company at the country» неестественны — лучше сказать «kept» и указать место более ясно («kept at my parents' house» или «stored at my family's summer home»).

예시: Yes, I had a red bicycle when I was a child. My parents gave it to me as a graduation present from primary school, so I was very proud of it. I loved riding it around the neighborhood every afternoon, and now it is safely kept at my parents' house as a memento.

제안: Улучшите грамматику и логическую структуру, избегайте фрагментарных предложений и пауз («uh»). Дайте прямой ответ, затем разовьите мысль с конкретными причинами и сравнениями. Используйте связки (for example, however, because) правильно и стройте полные предложения. Уточните, что имеете в виду под «popular» — как средство передвижения, спорт или хобби.

예시: Yes, bicycles are fairly popular in my country, but not as common as in China. For example, cycling is mostly a weekend hobby or a sport here because many cities lack safe bike lanes. In contrast, China has more people cycling daily for commuting due to better cycling infrastructure and culture.

× When I was a child, I used to have a red bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a red bike.

The phrase 'used to' indicates a past habitual action and is grammatically acceptable, but in this context 'had' is more natural and concise when simply stating possession in the past. Use 'used to' when you want to emphasize a repeated or habitual action; otherwise use the simple past for facts.

× I got a real kick out of cycling on this bike because it was given to me by my parents as a present for graduation from primary school.

✓ I got a real kick out of cycling on it because my parents gave it to me as a graduation present from primary school.

The original sentence is long and slightly awkward. Rearranging to active voice ('my parents gave it to me') and replacing the repeated noun with a pronoun improves clarity and flow. Use active voice for concise, natural sentences.

× That is why, yes, as a child I used to have this bike and it is still conserved and it stays at the company at the country.

✓ So yes, I had that bike as a child, and it is still preserved; it stays at my parents' company in the countryside.

Multiple problems: 'used to have' is redundant after restating the fact, 'conserved' is not the correct word in this context (use 'preserved' or 'kept'), and 'at the company at the country' is ungrammatical. Also specify ownership/location correctly ('my parents' company' and 'countryside'). Rewriting into two clauses improves readability and correctness.

× As far as I know, bikes are still popular in my country.

✓ As far as I know, bicycles are still popular in my country.

'Bikes' is colloquial but not incorrect; replacing with 'bicycles' is slightly more formal and appropriate for a test answer. The present tense 'are' correctly expresses a current general fact.

× However, they are not as popular as in China for example.

✓ However, they are not as popular as they are in China, for example.

The comparison needs a complete clause after 'as' for clarity. Adding 'they are' makes the comparison grammatically complete and clearer.

× Because in China this healthy lifestyle is really widespread among all the populations of people of all ages may have freely cycle bikes without any limitations.

✓ In China this healthy lifestyle is really widespread among people of all ages, who can cycle freely without many limitations.

The original is a run-on with incorrect structure ('among all the populations of people of all ages may have'). Rewrite into two clear parts: 'among people of all ages' and a relative clause 'who can cycle freely'. Use 'cycle' as a verb; 'cycle bikes' is redundant.

× However, in Russia it isn't uh, so widespread and uh, popular.

✓ However, in Russia it isn't so widespread or popular.

Fillers 'uh' should be omitted in written answers. Use 'so widespread or popular' to connect the two adjectives correctly. The contraction 'isn't' is acceptable, but avoid disfluencies in formal responses.