Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, concise and relevant: start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details in logical order. Avoid unrelated or unclear phrases (e.g. “used to eat regularly for my classes”) and correct basic grammar (tenses, articles, word forms). Use linking words like “because” or “and” correctly and keep your answer under 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was in grade 11. It was a small white bicycle I used to ride to school with my friends. However, it didn’t have working lights, so we avoided riding after dark.

제안: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion first, then 2-3 concise, specific reasons using linking words (e.g. “because”, “also”, “for example”). Avoid fillers (‘uh’) and incorrect phrases (use ‘people’, ‘easy to travel through traffic’, and consistent tense). Keep each reason precise and give a short example or consequence.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to park. Also, bikes are more maneuverable in heavy traffic, so commuters save time. For example, many office workers use motorcycles to get to work faster during rush hour.

× Well yes, I had a bike when I was in plus one and I used to eat regularly for my classes with my friends and it is a white color active and moreover I have no lights.

✓ Well yes, I had a bike when I was in plus one, and I used to ride it regularly to my classes with my friends; it was white and had no lights.

Multiple issues: verb choice and past tense consistency. 'used to eat' is incorrect contextually; the correct verb is 'used to ride' to describe habitual past action. 'it is a white color active' is ungrammatical and mixes present tense; change to 'it was white' to match past time frame. 'I have no lights' should be 'it had no lights' to refer to the bike in the past. Suggestion: keep verbs in past tense when describing past possessions and use the correct verbs for the action (ride) and simple adjectives ('white') and proper possession wording ('had no lights').

× Yes, in my opinion, bikes are popular in our country because more peoples are using bikes uh, because, uh, it is lightweight, uh, easily, uh, travelable through traffic and there is no traffic condition in our country.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, bikes are popular in our country because more people are using them; they are lightweight and can easily travel through traffic, and there is heavy traffic congestion in our cities.

'peoples' is incorrect; use the plural 'people' for more than one person. Also pronoun agreement: refer back to 'bikes' with 'them' or use plural verbs 'they are'. 'it is lightweight' should be 'they are lightweight' to agree with plural 'bikes'. 'travelable' is nonstandard; use 'can easily travel through traffic' or 'are easy to ride through traffic.' Suggestion: use 'people' not 'peoples', maintain plural agreement with 'bikes' (they/them), and prefer standard adjectives/phrases ('easy to ride', 'can easily travel').

× The main problem was traffic congestion, so travelling in bike should be.

✓ The main problem is traffic congestion, so traveling by bike is a good solution.

The original sentence is incomplete and has tense inconsistency. 'The main problem was traffic congestion' switches to past; since discussing a general current situation, use present 'is'. 'travelling in bike should be' is fragmentary and ungrammatical: 'traveling by bike is a good solution' completes the thought and uses correct preposition 'by' for mode of transport. Suggestion: complete the sentence with the intended result and use 'by bike' rather than 'in bike', and choose present tense for general facts.