Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택에서 자연스럽지 않은 부분을 고치세요. ‘hit a bike’는 의미가 맞지 않으므로 ‘had a bike’로 바꾸고, 주제 문장을 명확히 한 뒤 이유를 간결하게 덧붙이세요. 예: 주제문 → 간단한 이유 → 상황 설명 순서로, 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요. 문장 수는 3문장 내외로 유지하세요.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I rarely rode it because I was quite afraid of falling. For example, after one small accident I became more cautious, so I usually walked instead of cycling.

제안: 중복 표현과 어색한 단어(‘transformation’)를 피하고 더 구체적인 이유와 예시를 제시하세요. 연결어(especially, for commuting, because)를 사용해 문장들을 자연스럽게 이어주고, 한두 개의 구체적인 상황(도시 통근, 학생 통학 등)을 들어 설득력을 높이세요.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short commutes. Many students and office workers cycle to school or work because it's cheap and faster than walking. For instance, in cities with bike lanes, cycling often beats taking a car during rush hour.

× Yes, I hit a bike when I was a child, but I didn't really like to ride it because I was so scared.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I didn't really like to ride it because I was so scared.

The verb 'hit' is incorrect in this context; the student intended to express possession in the past, which requires 'have' in past tense ('had'). Use 'hit' only when describing striking something. Suggestion: replace 'hit' with 'had' to indicate owning a bike in childhood.'

× I think it's very convenient and it's one of very convenient transformation.

✓ I think it's very convenient and it's one of the most convenient forms of transportation.

The phrase is ungrammatical: 'one of very convenient transformation' has article and noun form errors. 'One of the most ...' is the correct comparative structure and 'transformation' is wrong word choice; the intended word is 'transportation' or 'means of transport'. Also use plural or 'forms of'. Suggestion: use 'one of the most convenient forms of transportation' to express that bicycles are among the most convenient transport options.'

× Many adults and students ride bikes to go to school and work.

✓ Many adults and students ride bikes to get to school and work.

The original sentence is mostly correct, but 'go to school and work' is acceptable; however 'get to' is a more natural collocation with 'ride bikes'. No plural error, but small stylistic improvement suggested rather than strict grammatical fix.'