Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần cải thiện tính rõ ràng và mạch lạc. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, tránh từ ngập ngừng (“uh”) và sửa ngữ pháp/sai từ. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn (ví dụ: màu sắc, ai cho, khi nào bạn dùng nó) và dùng liên từ khi cần. Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was six. I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends after school, which helped me become more independent. It wasn’t very fast, but I loved it because it was sturdy and comfortable.

제안: Cần diễn đạt mạch lạc hơn, sửa cấu trúc câu và giảm lặp từ. Nên đưa thêm ví dụ cụ thể (thống kê, mục đích sử dụng, vùng nào phổ biến). Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (“eco-friendly”, “convenient”, “affordable”) và kết hợp liên từ để câu trôi chảy. Giữ ngắn gọn (1–3 câu).

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bikes to commute to markets or schools in urban areas, and they are also considered eco-friendly compared with cars.

× When I walk works at you, I had a small uh, bicycle or hence I rock.

✓ When I was a child, I had a small bicycle.

The original sentence mixes incorrect present-tense forms and unintelligible phrases. Use past tense 'was' for 'when I was a child' and simple past 'had' for possession. Remove extraneous words ('walk works at you', 'hence I rock') that are not grammatical. Suggestion: form a clear time clause 'When I was a child' + past tense verb 'I had'.

× Yes, it's I think it's a very easy, very popular in my country because bicycle is very convenient, uh eco friend, eco friendly, uh, and flexible uh.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because bicycles are very convenient, eco-friendly, and flexible.

The sentence has subject-verb agreement errors and article usage problems. 'I think it's a very easy, very popular' is ungrammatical: use 'I think bicycles are very popular' to match plural subject and plural verb. Also use plural 'bicycles' consistently or add an article 'the bicycle' for general statements; using plural is natural. 'Eco friendly' should be hyphenated as 'eco-friendly'. Remove filler words. Suggestion: use 'I think' + clause with correct subject-verb agreement and parallel adjectives.