Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 直接说明专业和学校。注意使用“majoring in”或“I study”，并将专业名称自然表达为“Big Data Management and Applications”。

예시: I’m studying Big Data Management and Applications at Beijing University of Science and Technology.

제안: 先明确回答喜欢与否；“Snapchat”和后面的“I had to”与题意不符，可能是表达失误。用“a bit difficult”代替“a very bit of difficult”，并补充一个具体原因。

예시: Yes, I do. I find my subject interesting and useful because I can learn how data is used to solve real problems. Some of the technical topics are a bit difficult, though.

제안: 理由清楚，可以减少停顿和重复，并修正“a very big challenging”为“a big challenge”。把就业前景和挑战自我的理由用连接词清晰串联。

예시: I chose this subject for two main reasons. First, data-related jobs are in demand in my country, so this degree could give me more career options. Also, I enjoy challenging myself with a difficult subject.

제안: 回答切题，但“I think”重复，且“a very upward trend for the technique”不自然。可用“is becoming increasingly popular”并解释行业需求或人工智能的发展。

예시: Yes, I think it’s quite popular in China. As more companies use big data and artificial intelligence, they need people who can analyse information and manage data systems.

제안: 说明未来计划时避免“exact plans for me”等生硬表达，并修正“skills that which”的语法。按时间顺序说清楚学习、求职计划，细节保持简洁。

예시: Over the next five years, I’d like to strengthen my technical skills, especially in data analysis. After that, I hope to find a job in the field so I can apply what I’ve learned and gain practical experience.

제안: 题目问的是这个年龄的好处，答案却主要谈压力，且开头和结尾不完整。先给出一个明确优点，再补充具体例子；也可以平衡地提到竞争压力。

예시: One benefit of being my age is that I have plenty of time to explore different career options. Although the job market is competitive, I can still build my skills and learn from new experiences.

제안: 立场明确。将“this major for me is very good”改得更自然，并具体说明专业适合你的原因；“improve my ability of the major”可改为“develop my skills in this field”。

예시: No, I don’t. I’m happy with my major because it suits my interests and offers good career opportunities. Instead of changing it, I’d like to develop my skills in this field.

제안: 回答有理由，但“sleepy”重复，“very clear”和“many things in my brain”不够自然。使用“more alert”及“concentrate better”，并适当压缩句子。

예시: I prefer studying in the morning because I feel more alert then. In the afternoon, I often get sleepy, whereas in the morning I can concentrate better and remember information more easily.

제안: 给出了考试周和平时的对比，这是具体信息。把“it's up to the time”改为“it depends on my workload”，并统一时间表达和单复数，例如“10 hours a week”。

예시: It depends on my workload. Before a major exam, I may study for five or six hours a day, which adds up to around 40 hours a week. During a quieter week, I might only study for about 10 hours.

제안: 解释了不太期待工作的原因，但“tired”形容人，形容实习应使用“tiring”。避免重复强调疲惫，并说明继续深造能带来的具体好处。

예시: Not particularly, because I found my internship quite tiring. I’d prefer to continue studying for a while, as that would help me improve my skills before starting a full-time job.

제안: 目前没有清楚列出你使用的工具。直接说出具体设备或应用，并用一两句说明用途；注意使用“AI tools”和“the internet”等自然表达。

예시: I mainly use my laptop and the internet when I study. I also use AI tools to explain difficult concepts and help me organise my notes.

제안: 建议选择一到两个改变并具体说明。“changes that I want to look”应改为“changes I’d like to see”；食物可说“improve the quality of the food”。第二个想法表达不清，需换成明确例子。

예시: I’d like to see better food options in the school cafeteria because the meals are often not very tasty. It would also be nice to have more green spaces where students can relax between classes.

× I am major in the Big Data management and application in the Beijing Science and Technology University.

✓ I am majoring in Big Data Management and Applications at Beijing Science and Technology University.

这里使用“am”构成现在进行时，后面的动词应使用 -ing 形式，因此应为“am majoring”。

× I am major in the Big Data management and application in the Beijing Science and Technology University.

✓ I am majoring in Big Data Management and Applications at Beijing Science and Technology University.

学科名称前通常不需要定冠词“the”；大学名称前也通常不加“the”。注意专有名称的大小写应按学校官方名称书写。

× Yes, I like my Snapchat. I had to and I think it's a very interesting and useful subject for me, but sometimes I think it's a very bit of difficult for me.

✓ Yes, I like my Snapchat, and I think it's a very interesting and useful subject for me, but sometimes I find it a bit difficult.

“I had to”后面缺少必要的动作或内容，单独放在这里会形成不完整句子。可以删去这个不完整片段，并用“and”连接完整的意思。

× Yes, I like my Snapchat. I had to and I think it's a very interesting and useful subject for me, but sometimes I think it's a very bit of difficult for me.

✓ Yes, I like my Snapchat, and I think it's a very interesting and useful subject for me, but sometimes I find it a bit difficult.

“a very bit of difficult”中的数量表达不正确。“a bit”后可直接接形容词，例如“a bit difficult”；也可以说“very difficult”，但不能将“very”和“a bit of”这样组合。

× Firstly, I think this subject is very popular in my, uh, chi countries and I think it can give me more chances to get a good job.

✓ Firstly, I think this subject is very popular in my country, and I think it can give me more chances to get a good job.

“my”后面需要与实际所指的国家数量一致。这里说的是自己的国家，应使用单数“country”，而不是“countries”。

× Secondly, I think this is a very complicated subject and it's a very big challenging for me.

✓ Secondly, I think this is a very complicated subject, and it's a big challenge for me.

“challenging”是形容词，不能与“a”搭配构成这里所需的名词短语。要表达“一个很大的挑战”，应使用名词“challenge”。

× I think I think the big data topic is very popular in all the world.

✓ I think the big data topic is very popular around the world.

表示“在全世界范围内”通常说“around the world”，不说“in all the world”。

× It's a very upward trend for the technique and maybe artificial intelligence.

✓ There is an upward trend in technology and perhaps artificial intelligence.

“very”通常不能这样修饰“upward”。描述趋势时可以直接说“an upward trend”；另外，表达某领域的趋势常用“a trend in ...”。

× Yes, of course I have the exact plans for me for the next 5 years.

✓ Yes, of course, I have exact plans for myself for the next five years.

“the next five years”中的“the”是正确且必要的，因为“next”与时间段连用时通常需要定冠词。此处修改保留了正确的冠词用法，并调整了“for me”的反身表达，使其与主语一致。

× Firstly, I think I need to improve my professional skills that which can support me to have a good job.

✓ Firstly, I think I need to improve my professional skills, which can help me get a good job.

“that”和“which”不能在这里同时引导同一个定语从句。保留其中一个即可；这里使用“which”。

× Secondly, I think I need to find a good job about this subject and it can also push me.

✓ Secondly, I think I need to find a good job in this field, and it can also motivate me.

表示某个专业或领域相关的工作时，通常用“a job in this field”，而不是“a job about this subject”。

× I think it's not a good guys, there is not some good benefits of my age because it's a very competitive age and we all need to have good grades and ability to get a position for a job and I think.

✓ I don't think being my age is a good thing. There aren't many benefits to being my age because it is a very competitive age, and we all need good grades and abilities to get a job.

“a”后面应接单数名词，因此“a good guys”中的单复数不一致。这里可改为“a good thing”。

× I think it's not a good guys, there is not some good benefits of my age because it's a very competitive age and we all need to have good grades and ability to get a position for a job and I think.

✓ I don't think being my age is a good thing. There aren't many benefits to being my age because it is a very competitive age, and we all need good grades and abilities to get a job.

“benefits”是复数，因此“There be”句型应使用“There are”，否定形式为“There aren't”，不能使用“There is”。

× I think it's not a good guys, there is not some good benefits of my age because it's a very competitive age and we all need to have good grades and ability to get a position for a job and I think.

✓ I don't think being my age is a good thing. There aren't many benefits to being my age because it is a very competitive age, and we all need good grades and abilities to get a job.

“some”通常不用于这种否定表达。这里要表达“没有很多好处”，应使用“many”，并说“There aren't many benefits”。

× Oh, I'd like to study in the morning because when I study in the afternoon, I usually want to sleep, and I'm very sleepy in the afternoon, but in the morning I'm very clear and there are many things in my brain, and my memory ability is very good.

✓ Oh, I'd like to study in the morning because when I study in the afternoon, I usually want to sleep, and I'm very sleepy in the afternoon. In the morning, though, I feel very alert, and my memory is very good.

“in the afternoon”中的“the”是必要的，用来指一天中的下午时段。原句已经正确使用了该冠词；修改后的句子也保留了这一正确形式。

× I think it's up to the time. For example if I have a big exam and maybe I will put 5 or 6 hours per day and maybe 40 hours a week and if the time is some relaxed maybe just 10 hour a week.

✓ I think it depends on the situation. For example, if I have a big exam, I might study for five or six hours per day, perhaps 40 hours a week. If my schedule is more relaxed, I might study for just 10 hours a week.

数字“10”后面的可数名词“hour”应使用复数形式“hours”。

× I think it's up to the time. For example if I have a big exam and maybe I will put 5 or 6 hours per day and maybe 40 hours a week and if the time is some relaxed maybe just 10 hour a week.

✓ I think it depends on the situation. For example, if I have a big exam, I might study for five or six hours per day, perhaps 40 hours a week. If my schedule is more relaxed, I might study for just 10 hours a week.

“relaxed”在这里描述安排或日程，应修饰名词，例如“a relaxed schedule”。原来的“the time is some relaxed”结构和形容词用法不正确。

× Actually not, because I have been through an internship and I think it's very tired and tired, so tired for me.

✓ Actually, no, because I have done an internship, and I found it very tiring.

“tired”通常描述人的感受；描述实习这件事令人疲惫，应使用“tiring”。“very tired and tired, so tired”也重复表达了相同意思。

× Maybe the artificial intelligence and if the need of the computer and there are many Internet techno technique that I need to use.

✓ I use artificial intelligence and computers, and there are many internet technologies that I need to use.

原句前半部分是没有完整谓语的片段，“if the need of the computer”也没有构成完整的条件句。需要改写成有明确主语和谓语的完整句子。

× Maybe the artificial intelligence and if the need of the computer and there are many Internet techno technique that I need to use.

✓ I use artificial intelligence and computers, and there are many internet technologies that I need to use.

“many”后面需要接可数名词复数，因此应说“many technologies”，不能使用单数“technique”。

× I think there are many changes that I want to look in my school, such as I want to, for example, I want to, my school's food is very, uh, is be more delicious because I think the food that in my school is very, uh, bad.

✓ I would like to see several changes at my school. For example, I would like the food at my school to be more delicious because I think it is very bad.

“such as”后面的内容原本没有形成连贯的句子，而且“I want to”重复后没有接完整的动词结构。可以将想法整理成完整的主句和例子。

× I think there are many changes that I want to look in my school, such as I want to, for example, I want to, my school's food is very, uh, is be more delicious because I think the food that in my school is very, uh, bad.

✓ I would like to see several changes at my school. For example, I would like the food at my school to be more delicious because I think it is very bad.

“the food that in my school”中的关系从句缺少动词。改成“the food at my school”后，句子结构完整；后面再用“is”说明食物的情况。