Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答基本直接，但缺少句号，且“senior student”可以说成“a final-year student”，更自然、更符合英语表达。建议先明确身份，再补充专业或学习阶段，使答案完整流畅。

예시: I’m currently a final-year student majoring in Business English. I’m expected to graduate next year, so I’m mainly focusing on my courses and preparing for my future career.

제안: 信息清楚，但“Now I'm studying”略显重复，可以直接说“I study at...”。地名之间需要使用逗号，即“Guangzhou, Guangdong Province”。可以增加一个简短的学校或城市特点，让答案更自然。

예시: I study at Guangdong University of Technology in Guangzhou, Guangdong Province. It’s a large university with a lively campus and plenty of academic resources.

제안: 回答有观点和原因，但“Guangzhou College town”应改为“Guangzhou Higher Education Mega Center”或“a university town”，“exchange opportunities”搭配不自然。建议使用“because/which means”等连接词，并具体说明共享哪些资源，例如课程、图书馆或学术活动。

예시: Yes, I think it’s a good place to study because it’s located in a university town. Several colleges are nearby, so students can share libraries, attend academic events and learn from one another.

제안: 回答的观点明确，也给出了具体原因，但“Exactly”不适合用来直接回答此类问题，建议改为“Yes, definitely”。“open to public”应为“open to the public”，“threaten students' safety”可以改为“pose a risk to students’ safety”。避免连续使用两个“school”，使表达更简洁。

예시: Yes, definitely. I’d like the university to improve campus security because it is open to the public, which means that anyone can enter. More security checks and cameras could help protect students.

제안: 回答包含未来计划、专业变化和原因，内容完整，但“have a deep learning”不自然，应改为“pursue further studies”或“gain more in-depth knowledge”。“commercial subject”表达较模糊，建议使用“business-related subject”或具体专业；同时注意避免过长句子，可用“because”清楚连接原因。

예시: I’m considering going abroad for further study after graduation. I may switch from Business English to a business-related field, such as marketing or international trade, because I think it would give me more career opportunities.

× Exactly, I think it can improve the security because our school is open to public and anyone can enter the school. So it may threaten students' safety

✓ Exactly, I think it can improve security because our school is open to the public, and anyone can enter the school. So it may threaten students' safety.

“the public”是固定表达，表示“公众”，前面通常需要使用定冠词“the”。“security”在这里表示一般意义上的校园安全，是不可数名词，通常不需要使用“the”。

× Maybe I will go abroad to have a deep learning but I will change my major from business English to some commercial subject because I think commercial subject can help me find jobs.

✓ Maybe I will go abroad to study in depth, but I will change my major from business English to a commercial subject because I think a commercial subject can help me find jobs.

“have a deep learning”不是自然的英语表达。表示“深入学习”时，应使用“study in depth”。此外，“subject”是可数名词单数，前面需要限定词，因此应说“a commercial subject”，而不能直接说“commercial subject”。