Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意図は伝わりますが、文法・語順・語彙選択に多くの誤りがあります。まず、主題文（I am a student）を明確にし、その後に専攻を自然な語順で続けてください。専攻を言うときは “I study (subject) at (university)” の形を使い、理由（好きだから）を述べる時は接続詞（because / as / since）で繋ぎ、簡潔な理由を一つに絞って具体的に述べます。例文では正しい語順、動詞形、自然な語彙（mechanical engineering, because I love cars）を示します。

예시: I am a student at Tobi University. I study mechanical engineering because I love cars.

제안: 文が混ざっており意味が不明瞭です。現在の在籍場所を尋ねられているので、まず現在形で簡潔に答え（I study in Kobe）、その後必要なら理由を一つ付け加えます。地名を複数挙げるのは混乱を招くので避け、比較や理由を述べる際は明確な接続語（because / and / which）を使ってください。

예시: I study in Kobe. It’s a quiet city, which makes it a good place to focus on my studies.

제안: 肯定はできていますが、比較対象（Oslo）や名詞の複数形、語順に誤りがあります。比較をするなら根拠を一つに絞り（e.g. quieter, safer, well-equipped）具体的な例（library, study rooms）を正しい形で述べてください。文は2〜3文で簡潔にまとめ、冠詞や複数形に注意しましょう。

예시: Yes. My university is a good place to study because it is quieter than other cities nearby. There are many good libraries and quiet study rooms on campus.

제안: 伝えたい内容（図書館が混雑しているので机や椅子を増やしてほしい）は明確ですが、表現が不自然で時制や語順、語彙が誤っています。要望は丁寧な表現（I would like the university to...）で始め、問題の状況を短く説明し、具体的な改善案（add more desks and chairs, extend opening hours, create more study spaces）を列挙してください。接続詞で論理をつなぎましょう。

예시: I would like the university to add more desks and chairs in the libraries. During exam periods the libraries are very crowded, so increasing study spaces would help students find seats.

제안: 意図（機械工学をもっと学びたい、車が好き）があるのは分かりますが、文が崩れており最後で途切れています。将来計画を述べる際は、まず明確な目標（e.g. continue studying mechanical engineering / join a research group）を述べ、理由（because I love cars）と具体的な行動（join a club, do internships, study abroad）を続けてください。簡潔な英文で3文以内に収めましょう。

예시: I plan to continue studying mechanical engineering and focus on automotive design because I love cars. I want to join the university’s engineering club and do internships with local workshops to gain practical experience.

× I'm a student in Tobi University. I made here to General Mechanical in Genior Blue because it's my favorite thing is car.

✓ I'm a student at Tobi University. I came here to study General Mechanics in the Engineering department because my favourite thing is cars.

The original has multiple issues: incorrect preposition 'in' for university (use at), incorrect verb 'made' (use came), incorrect phrase 'made here to' (sentence structure), wrong noun phrase 'General Mechanical in Genior Blue' was unclear and likely should be 'General Mechanics in the Engineering department', and awkward clause 'because it's my favorite thing is car' needs rephrasing to 'because my favourite thing is cars'. Suggestion: simplify each idea into clear parts: location, purpose, and reason; use correct prepositions and subject-verb order. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I studied I am studying in Kobe so Quebec is a great place to study because it's quiet and Osaka.

✓ I am studying in Kobe, so Kobe is a great place to study because it's quiet.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses ('I studied I am studying') and contains confusing place names ('Kobe so Quebec ... and Osaka'). Preserve present continuous 'I am studying' to match current study, and keep the place consistent. Suggestion: use one tense for current activities and state one correct location. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, Our University is a good place to study because it's quieter than Oslo. There are many good library in Tobay University.

✓ Yes. Our university is a good place to study because it's quieter than Osaka. There are many good libraries at Tobi University.

Capitalization is inconsistent ('Our University'), comparison likely intended with Osaka not Oslo, and noun 'library' should be plural 'libraries' when preceded by 'many'. Also use preposition 'at' for location of libraries. Suggestion: check proper nouns, pluralize countable nouns after 'many', and use correct comparison target. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I want to make the live release take more desk and chair it was in the exam time, there are many students in library. Sometimes we can't use libraries.

✓ I want the living area to have more desks and chairs because during exam time there are many students in the library. Sometimes we cannot use the library.

The original uses unclear phrases 'make the live release' and incorrect singular/plural forms 'desk and chair'. It also runs two clauses without proper connection. Correct by specifying 'living area' (or 'study space'), pluralizing 'desks and chairs', and fixing tense and article use: 'the library' when referring to a specific university library. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses and use plural for multiple items and definite article for known places. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I want to study mechanic club engineering especially very cool because I love car and I often work through riders feel hostile curious. So now I ask the

✓ I want to study mechanical engineering, especially because it is very interesting and I love cars. I often work with riders and feel curious about their experiences.

Many errors: 'mechanic club engineering' should be 'mechanical engineering'; 'especially very cool' is informal and awkward—replace with 'especially because it is very interesting'; 'I love car' needs plural 'cars'; 'I often work through riders feel hostile curious' is ungrammatical and unclear—interpreted as 'I often work with riders and feel curious about their experiences'. Suggestion: use standard academic term 'mechanical engineering', pluralize nouns when needed, and rephrase unclear clauses into clear subject-verb-object structures. Grammar problem type ID:6