Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (current status), then one or two concise supporting details (recent qualification and short-term plan). Use linking words like 'however' or 'so' to connect ideas and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'year off' instead of 'year drop').

예시: I am currently a student; I recently completed my master's at Jadavpur University. I plan to take a year off to gain practical experience, so I will work in a consultancy role before resuming further studies.

제안: Organize chronologically with a clear topic sentence. Use concise descriptions and correct names/spelling. Use linking words like 'then' or 'after that' to make sequence clear and avoid repeating 'which is'.

예시: I studied in South Calcutta: first I finished high school at Nagornoanda, then I earned a BTech from Heritage Institute of Technology, and finally I completed my master's at Jadavpur University, a well-known public institution.

제안: Avoid long run-on sentences and repetition. Give a clear direct response, then one or two specific supporting points (academic quality, life skills, research training). Use linking words like 'also' or 'in addition'.

예시: Yes. My school provided strong academic foundations and important life skills. In addition, both my college and my university were research-focused and taught me practical research methods.

제안: Be specific and avoid colloquial or unclear phrases ('beat on a higher side' unclear). State one or two concrete changes with reasons and link them coherently. Use correct grammar and finish the thought instead of trailing off.

예시: Yes. I would lower the tuition fees at Heritage Institute of Technology because they are expensive for average students. Also, I would increase funding for research to support student projects and improve academic output.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the field, then briefly explain what it involves and why you chose it. Avoid hesitations and stray words; use linking words like 'which' or 'and' to connect ideas. Correct terminology (likely 'Computational Fluid Dynamics').

예시: I plan to pursue a PhD in Computational Fluid Dynamics, which combines civil and mechanical engineering. It focuses on fluid behaviour around offshore structures and bridges, and I chose it because I want to improve structural safety in marine environments.

× I have recently completed my masters from Jadavpur University.

✓ I recently completed my master's at Jadavpur University.

The present perfect 'have recently completed' is acceptable, but in speaking context simple past 'recently completed' is more natural. Also use the possessive form 'master's' and the preposition 'at' for institutions. Use consistent tense and correct noun form.

× I am planning to pursue higher study but as I am taking a year drop, I am planning to do a consultancy job in between.

✓ I plan to pursue higher studies, but since I am taking a year off, I plan to do a consultancy job in the meantime.

Use simple present 'plan' or present continuous consistently; 'higher study' should be plural 'higher studies'; 'year drop' is nonstandard — use 'year off'; 'in between' is better expressed as 'in the meantime'. Avoid repeating 'I am planning' to reduce redundancy.

× I finished my high school at Nagornoanda which is a very reputed school in South Calcutta.

✓ I finished high school at Nagornoanda, which is a very reputable school in South Calcutta.

Use 'finished high school' (no 'my' necessary but acceptable); 'reputed' is less common in this context — 'reputable' is more natural. Add a comma before the relative clause. Tense is correct (simple past) for completed education.

× I pursued my Btech from Heritage Institute of Technology which is a private university and completed my Masters from Jadapur University which is a very renowned public State University.

✓ I pursued my BTech at the Heritage Institute of Technology, which is a private university, and completed my master's at Jadavpur University, which is a well-known public state university.

'BTech' capitalization standardization; use 'at' for institutions; include definite article 'the' before institute name if it's a specific institution; 'Masters' should be 'master's'; correct spelling 'Jadavpur'; use commas around nonrestrictive clauses; 'well-known' or 'renowned' is fine but 'public state university' should be lowercase 'state'.

× Yes, my school was definitely a renowned place where I not only learnt about academics but also a lot about life and my colleges where I where I had done my post graduation and graduations from those two colleges are also very popular colleges.

✓ Yes, my school was definitely a renowned place where I not only learned about academics but also learned a lot about life, and the colleges where I completed my undergraduate and postgraduate studies are also very well known.

This sentence is run-on and repetitive ('where I where I', 'colleges' repeated). Use parallel structure: 'undergraduate and postgraduate studies' instead of 'graduations' and 'post graduation'. Replace 'learnt' with 'learned' or keep 'learnt' consistent; remove redundant words and fix word order for clarity.

× They have taught me how to do research work.

✓ They taught me how to conduct research.

'Have taught' (present perfect) can be used, but simple past 'taught' matches previous sentences about completed education. 'Do research work' is awkward; 'conduct research' is more natural and concise.

× Yes, I would like to change the fee structure of Heritage Institute of Technology.

✓ Yes, I would like to change the fee structure at the Heritage Institute of Technology.

Use 'at' or 'of' consistently; adding the definite article 'the' before the institute name is natural in English. 'Fee structure at the X' is a common collocation.

× I think it is beat on a higher side for a mediocre student.

✓ I think it is a bit on the higher side for an average student.

'beat' is a typo for 'bit'; 'mediocre student' is better expressed as 'average student' to be less negative; use article 'a' before 'bit' and 'higher side' requires 'on the'.

× I think there is need for research fund there.

✓ I think there is a need for research funding there.

Missing article 'a' before 'need' and 'research fund' is better expressed as 'research funding'. 'There' at the end is acceptable but could be omitted or replaced by 'at the institute'.

× So I would like.

✓ So I would like that to be changed.

The original fragment 'So I would like.' is incomplete. Provide the intended object: 'that to be changed' or 'to see that change' to complete the sentence.

× I am planning to pursue my PhD in Computational Free Dynamics.

✓ I am planning to pursue my PhD in Computational Fluid Dynamics.

The term 'Computational Free Dynamics' appears to be a mistake; the correct field is likely 'Computational Fluid Dynamics'. This is a vocabulary correction; keeping tense 'am planning' is fine.

× It is a specialized domain, rather I should say a interdisciplinary domain of both civil engineering and mechanical engineering department.

✓ It is a specialized domain; rather, I should say it is an interdisciplinary field involving both civil and mechanical engineering departments.

Use a semicolon or separate clauses; add 'it is' for clarity; 'a interdisciplinary' should be 'an interdisciplinary'; prefer 'field' rather than 'domain' and 'involving' for clearer relation between departments.

× It deals with mainly the offshore structures and the bridges in civil engineering domain I.

✓ It mainly deals with offshore structures and bridges in the civil engineering domain.

Place adverb 'mainly' before the verb phrase; remove article before 'offshore structures' and 'bridges'; add 'the' before 'civil engineering domain' and remove stray 'I' at the end. Reorder for natural English word order.