Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Say your year and level once and correct small grammar errors (use 'in' or 'year' appropriately).

예시: I'm a student in the 11th grade at a local high school.

제안: Give a brief statement about the school, then add one or two specific reasons for your feelings using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'however'). Avoid unnecessary repetition of grade information.

예시: I study at a local high school in my hometown. However, I don't particularly like it because there are limited extracurricular activities and the facilities are outdated, and since I'm in my final year I can't transfer now.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, then support with specific examples. Use correct grammar and linking words like 'but' or 'however.' Avoid filler sounds and incomplete sentences.

예시: Overall it's an acceptable place to study. Although I don't enjoy the school atmosphere, some teachers—especially the Russian and English teachers—are excellent; they explain difficult topics clearly and give helpful feedback on assignments.

제안: Avoid sounding dismissive; give a direct answer and a brief reason with linking words. Even if you don't want changes, mention one small improvement you would appreciate. This shows maturity and language range.

예시: Not really, since I'm leaving in nine months, I don't expect major changes. However, I would appreciate better study resources in the library to help final-year students prepare for exams.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about your plans, then provide a short, organized outline of steps with appropriate linking words (first, then, after that). Correct prepositions and reduce repetition.

예시: I plan to study geography and English. First I'll spend the first semester studying in Almaty, Kazakhstan, and then I hope to continue my degree at a university in Italy.

× I study at school as a 11th grade student.

✓ I study at school as an 11th-grade student.

Use the article 'an' before a vowel sound and hyphenate '11th-grade' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. 'a 11th' is incorrect; 'an 11th-grade student' is grammatically correct and clearer.

× I study at local school in my hometown.

✓ I study at a local school in my hometown.

When referring to one nonspecific school among many, use the indefinite article 'a'. 'local school' needs an article: 'a local school'.

× Actually, I do not like my school.

✓ Actually, I do not like my school.

No grammatical change needed; sentence structure is acceptable. (Included to show it's correct per list; no correction performed.)

× I'd like to move to another school, but it's not possible because it's my 11th grade and my last year in school.

✓ I'd like to move to another school, but it's not possible because I'm in 11th grade and it's my last year at school.

Use 'I'm in 11th grade' rather than 'it's my 11th grade'. Also prefer 'at school' or 'in school' for last year; this corrects subject reference and idiomatic expression.

× Is it a good place to study?

✓ Is it a good place to study?

Sentence is correct; no article change needed. (Included to indicate correctness.)

× Uh, honestly I would say so, Although I do not like my school, as I said, there are still good teachers in my school, especially Russian and English teacher which are very.

✓ Uh, honestly I would say so. Although I do not like my school, as I said, there are still good teachers at my school, especially the Russian and English teachers, who are very good at their jobs.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence/punctuation fixed; use 'at my school' not 'in my school'; use plural 'teachers' when referring to two subjects; include definite article 'the' before specific teachers; replace 'which' with 'who' for people; complete the fragment 'very' to 'very good at their jobs'. Also change 'their job' to 'their jobs' to match plural teachers.

× Do well their job.

✓ They do their jobs well.

Correct word order is subject + verb + object + adverb: 'They do their jobs well.' Also use plural 'jobs' to match 'teachers'.

× Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?

✓ Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?

Sentence is grammatically correct as a modal question; no change needed.

× Honestly, no, because I don't care.

✓ Honestly, no, because I don't care.

Sentence is acceptable in present tense; no correction needed.

× This is my last year in my school so I will leave school in about nine months.

✓ This is my last year at school, so I will leave in about nine months.

Use 'at school' for idiomatic expression and remove redundant 'school' after 'leave'. Also add a comma before 'so'.

× So no, I don't want because I don't care.

✓ So no, I don't want any changes because I don't care.

Make the object explicit: 'I don't want any changes' clarifies what 'don't want' refers to and improves sentence completeness.

× This is really interesting question.

✓ This is a really interesting question.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'really interesting question'.

× I love this question.

✓ I love this question.

Sentence is correct; pronoun use is appropriate. (Included to confirm no change needed.)

× I am going to study geography and English and I'm going to study first semester in my in Kazakhstan, in Almaty and after that I'm going to move to Italy to local to study in local university.

✓ I am going to study geography and English. I'm going to spend the first semester in Kazakhstan, in Almaty, and after that I'm going to move to Italy to study at a local university.

Multiple corrections: split into clearer sentences; remove extra 'my' before 'in Kazakhstan'; use 'spend the first semester' for natural phrasing; add commas for clarity; use 'study at a local university' (preposition 'at' with 'university') and include the indefinite article 'a'. This fixes preposition, article, and sentence structure issues.