Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), use correct tense and smoother linking. Give one or two brief specific details about your role (e.g., types of tests or a typical task) and finish with a short purpose/benefit. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I work as a software engineer at TCS in Bangalore, specializing in quality assurance. I test networking software—mainly functional and integration tests—to ensure the systems that manage networks run reliably.

제안: Respond directly and fully: give a clear topic sentence and a brief reason or context. Avoid fillers and expand one sentence into two if needed (state current status and a short explanation).

예시: I am not studying at the moment because I work full time as a software engineer. I hope to return to study later for a master's degree.

제안: Clarify what 'here' refers to and give specific supportive details using linking words. Smoothly connect ideas and correct minor grammar. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to study because the campus has excellent infrastructure. For example, there are separate areas for sports and quiet study, which helps me focus and relax.

제안: Organize your answer with a topic sentence and then list 2 specific improvements using linking words (first, also, finally). Use more precise vocabulary (variety of options, facilities) and correct grammar (there are not many options). Keep to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like several improvements on campus. First, the canteen should offer more variety and better food quality because currently there are not many options. Also, adding a dedicated innovation lab would give students more space and equipment for projects.

제안: Make sentences grammatically correct and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence about your plans, then give specific subjects and a brief reason. Avoid repetition and correct tense mistakes (I did my bachelor’s). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I plan to pursue a master's degree in Germany, focusing on VLSI or a related area. I completed a bachelor’s in Electronics and Communications, so I want to continue in a specialized field to advance my career in chip design.

× I am currently working as a software engineer at TCS in Bangalore.

✓ I am currently working as a software engineer at TCS in Bangalore.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. It uses the present continuous to describe current employment.

× I work on, uh, quality assurance where I, uh, test the products which is developed by my company and that is related to networking, uh, where we test, uh, software, which is uh, managing the network.

✓ I work in quality assurance where I test the products which are developed by my company and that are related to networking, where we test software that manages the network.

Subject-verb agreement and relative clause agreement: 'products' is plural so the relative clause needs plural verb 'are' not 'is'. Also 'that are related' matches plural 'products'. Use 'that manages the network' or 'which manage the network' depending on intended subject; here 'software' is singular or uncountable so 'that manages' is appropriate. Removing filler words improves clarity.

× Currently I'm not studying, I'm uh, working full time, uh.

✓ Currently I'm not studying; I'm working full time.

No tense change required but punctuation and filler removal improve clarity. The present continuous 'I'm not studying' and 'I'm working' correctly describe current states.

× Yes, I like studying here.

✓ Yes, I like studying here.

Sentence is correct as is. Pronoun use is appropriate.

× It has a good infrastructure where there are separate places for playing and studying I like.

✓ It has good infrastructure, with separate places for studying and playing, which I like.

Run-on sentence and awkward word order. Rearranged to place 'which I like' after the clause it modifies and used parallel noun phrases 'studying and playing'.

× Close Yes, I would like some improvements made in the campus.

✓ Yes, I would like some improvements made on the campus.

Preposition choice: we say 'on the campus' rather than 'in the campus'. Also removed stray word 'Close'.

× I want them to improve the food quality in the canteen as there are not much options available for students.

✓ I want them to improve the food quality in the canteen as there are not many options available for students.

'Options' is countable, so use 'many' not 'much'. Also 'in the canteen' is fine; consider 'at the canteen' as an alternative.

× I want them to include multiple cuisines so it is suited for all students and I would also like them to have another lab for innovation.

✓ I want them to include multiple cuisines so that the food suits all students, and I would also like them to provide another innovation lab.

Improved connector 'so that' for purpose, adjusted 'suited for all students' to 'suits all students' for natural phrasing, and 'have another lab for innovation' changed to 'provide another innovation lab' for clarity and conciseness.

× I'm planning to do Ms. in Germany.

✓ I'm planning to do an M.S. in Germany.

Formality and article: use 'an M.S.' (or 'a master's degree') rather than 'Ms.' which can be confused with the title 'Ms.'. The present continuous 'I'm planning' correctly indicates future intention.

× I've did my bachelors in electronics and communications.

✓ I've done my bachelor's in Electronics and Communication Engineering.

Incorrect past participle: after 'I've' (I have) use past participle 'done', not simple past 'did'. Also include the apostrophe in 'bachelor's' and capitalize the subject as a proper field name; consider 'a bachelor's degree in Electronics and Communication Engineering' for clarity.

× So I'm planning on doing masters related to the same subject such as VLSI or related topics.

✓ So I'm planning to do a master's related to the same subject, such as VLSI or similar topics.

Use 'to do a master's' or 'to pursue a master's degree' rather than 'doing masters'. 'Such as VLSI or similar topics' avoids repetition and improves natural phrasing.

× Same.

✓ Same.

Single-word reply 'Same' is acceptable colloquially; no grammatical correction needed.