Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够自然且有语法错误。建议：用一句明确的主题句直接回答问题（I am a...），随后简短说明专业和原因（不超过2句）。注意语法（major in, choose → chose/ I chose）和措辞（neighbor helping people意思不清，应改为“to help people”）。

예시: I am a senior student studying Traditional Chinese Medicine. I chose this major because I want to help people by using both herbal and acupuncture treatments.

제안: 句子含义不清且有时态和词汇错误。建议：直接回答地点，用正确的动词（study at/in），并补充一句简单的定位信息（province, region）。避免使用模糊词如faded。

예시: I study at the university in Chengdu, the capital of Sichuan Province, which is located in the southwest of China.

제안: 句子过长且结构混乱，存在词汇搭配错误（price → place; I was great located → I am located）。建议：用一两句，先给出总体评价，再用具体理由支持，使用连词表逻辑（so, because）。减少重复（very fresh/very quiet）。

예시: Yes, it's a great place to study because my campus is located on the outskirts of the city, so the environment is quiet and peaceful, which helps me concentrate and reduces stress.

제안: 表达冗长且语法错误（I I, become → to be more convenient）。建议：直接说明想要的改变，并给出原因或举例。使用条件/目的连词（so that, so I can）。保持句子简洁清晰。

예시: Yes. I would like the transportation to be improved so that I can get to the city center more easily and visit libraries and museums.

제안: 内容不连贯且严重语法和词汇错误（IPhones, Mr. degree, were pursuing）。建议：清楚陈述计划（pursue a master's degree abroad），说明原因并用过去时描述经历（a summer research program at Cambridge）作为支持。保持句子在5句以内且逻辑顺序清晰。

예시: I plan to pursue a master's degree overseas after graduation. This ambition began after a summer research program I attended when I was a sophomore at Cambridge University, which inspired me to study abroad.

× I am a senior student major in Traditional Chinese Medicine.

✓ I am a senior student majoring in Traditional Chinese Medicine.

此句使用動詞片語表達“主修”時應使用動名詞（-ing）形式構成現在分詞短語作定語或補語。原句用“major in”未加 -ing，結構不自然。建議使用“majoring in”或改為“I major in...”來表達。

× I choose this neighbor helping people.

✓ I chose this major to help people.

原句中“choose”時態與語境不符且“this neighbor”不合語義，應為“major”（專業）而非“neighbor”。動詞應用過去式或現在完成視語境，若說明選擇的原因用不定式“to help people”表示目的。建議把單詞拼寫與語序更正。

× I faded into the capital of Sichuan Province, which located in the southwest of China.

✓ I moved to the capital of Sichuan Province, which is located in the southwest of China.

原句“faded into”不符合語意，應使用表示遷移的動詞“moved to”。此外關係從句缺少謂語動詞“is located”。需要使用完整的關係從句“which is located...”。

× The price is very good for starting because I was great located on the outskirts of the city and the area is very fresh and this area is very quiet and peaceful which help me concentrate and reduce stress.

✓ The cost is very low to start with because I am located on the outskirts of the city. The area is very fresh, quiet and peaceful, which helps me concentrate and reduce stress.

原句有多處錯誤：1) “The price is very good for starting” 表達不自然，應改為“The cost is very low to start with”。2) 主語人稱和時態錯用“was great located”，應為“I am located”或“I live”（現在狀態）。3) 形容詞順序和連接重複，“very fresh and this area is very quiet and peaceful”應合併為“fresh, quiet and peaceful”。4) 關係從句謂語缺第三人稱單數-s，應為“which helps”。建議簡化句子，注意主謂一致與形容詞串聯。

× I'm hoping given this much thought before I I say I would like the traffic there become more convenient that I can get to the center of the city and to visit some libraries and museums.

✓ I've given this much thought before, and I would like the traffic there to become more convenient so that I can get to the city centre and visit libraries and museums.

原句有多處結構與語法問題：1) 重複“I I”。2) 時態與語態錯亂，“I'm hoping given this much thought before”應為完成時“I've given this much thought before”。3) 動詞不定式結構錯誤，“would like the traffic there become”應為“would like the traffic there to become”。4) 連接詞使用不當，目的從句用“so that”更自然。建議使用完成時表達過去的深思並用不定式/目的從句表達期望。

× IPhones were pursuing Mr. degree overseas after graduation.

✓ I plan to pursue my master's degree overseas after graduation.

原句存在單詞錯誤和時態/人稱錯用：1) “IPhones”明顯打字錯誤，應為“I”。2) “were pursuing”時態不恰當，應用一般現在或將來表計劃（plan to pursue / will pursue）。3) “Mr. degree”應為“master's degree”。建議用“I plan to pursue my master's degree overseas after graduation.”來清晰表達計劃。

× These ambitions are originated from a summer research program.

✓ These ambitions originated from a summer research program.

動詞“originate”作及物/不及物形式時，在描述事件來源通常用過去式“originated”或被動“are originated from”的使用較少且不自然。此處用一般過去時更自然。建議使用“originated”或改為被動更自然的表達“are the result of”。

× When I was a sophomore, I got an opportunity to be studying here in silence at Cambridge University.

✓ When I was a sophomore, I had an opportunity to study at Cambridge University.

原句“got an opportunity to be studying here in silence”結構不自然且包含多餘詞語“in silence”。正確表達應為“had an opportunity to study”或“got an opportunity to study”。“at Cambridge University” 是正確的介詞用法。建議簡化為“had an opportunity to study at Cambridge University”。