Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حاول أن تكون إجابتك أوضح وأسرع وتضم جملة موضوع مباشرة ثم تفاصيل قصيرة. صحح الأخطاء النحوية واستخدم زمن واحد. على سبيل المثال قل إنك طالب حالياً وتوضح مستواك وتعطي خطة مختصرة للمستقبل. تجنب كلمات غامضة مثل "stellar" إذا لم تكن متأكداً من الاستخدام الصحيح.

예시: I am currently a high school graduate and a student. I recently finished high school and I plan to start university next year to study business.

제안: استخدم جملة مباشرة تشرح المكان الذي درست فيه أو إذا توقفت عن الدراسة قل ذلك بوضوح والسبب. تجنب الكلمات غير المناسبة (مثل "eyelids") وفسر ما تقصده بعبارات بسيطة. حافظ على جمل قصيرة ومترابطة مع رابط سبب مثل 'because'.

예시: I studied at Al Noor High School in my hometown. I focused on preparing for my final exams so I could achieve a high score and enter university.

제안: ابدأ بجملة مباشرة توضح رأيك ثم اذكر سببين محددين. تجنب تكرار الكلمات وحاول استخدام عبارات بسيطة وصحيحة نحوياً مثل 'a lot of time' و'practice'. لا تذكر مصطلحات غير واضحة ('make an AI want') وبدلها بأهداف واضحة مثل تحسين المهارات اللغوية.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to study because I have a lot of free time for practice. For example, I can attend English classes and study independently to improve my speaking and listening skills.

제안: استخدم جملة موضوع بسيطة ثم صف التغييرات التي تريدها أو قل إنك راضٍ واذكر السبب. انتبه للقواعد مثل 'quiet' بدل 'quietly' و'more activities' دون ترتيب غير ضروري. قدم مثالاً واحداً أو اثنين عن تغييرات محددة مثل تحسين المرافق أو زيادة الأنشطة العملية.

예시: I am generally happy with my school because it is quiet and supportive. However, I would like more extracurricular activities and better study spaces, such as quieter libraries and group study rooms.

제안: ابدأ بجملة واضحة عن خطتك المستقبلية ثم اذكر سببين محددين. صحح الأخطاء النحوية (I prefer / study business / higher salary). استخدم مفردات مناسبة مثل 'career opportunities' بدلاً من 'opens' واذكر خطط عملية مثل نوع الأعمال أو الدرجة التي تريدها.

예시: I plan to study business at university because I want to become a businesswoman. I hope to gain management skills, increase my future salary, and eventually start my own company.

× I am a stellar student. I finish a high school. Now I want to go to study in university.

✓ I am a stellar student. I finished high school. Now I want to go to study at a university.

Errors: wrong verb tense and incorrect article/preposition use. 'Finish' should be past tense 'finished' because the action is completed. 'High school' is an uncountable or named institution here and when referring to graduating from it you say 'finish high school' (no a). Use 'study at a university' or 'go to university' in English; 'in university' is possible in British English but 'at a university' is clearer. Suggestion: use past tense for completed actions and use correct articles/prepositions with institutions.

× No, I don't study because I want to get the eyelids to get an high school high score, to get to go to the university, complete my studying.

✓ No, I am not studying now because I want to get a high school high score so I can go to university and complete my studies.

Errors: incorrect tense and awkward purpose phrasing. Use 'am not studying now' for current temporary state. 'Get the eyelids' is meaningless; likely meant 'get a high score'. Use 'a high school high score' → 'a high score in high school' or simply 'a high school high score'. Use 'so I can go to university' to express purpose. 'Complete my studying' → 'complete my studies'. Suggestion: use present continuous for temporary actions and clear purpose clauses with 'so I can' or 'in order to'.

× I think yes because now I have an A lot of time to make enough practicing for everything I have allowed in on like English. I want to improve my language in English and make an AI want to be a good skills.

✓ I think so because now I have a lot of time to practice enough for everything I am allowed to, like English. I want to improve my English and develop good skills.

Errors: wrong article capitalization 'A lot' -> 'a lot of'. 'Make enough practicing' → correct verb 'practice' not 'make practicing'. 'Everything I have allowed in on' is ungrammatical; likely 'everything I am allowed to' or 'everything I'm working on'. 'Improve my language in English' → 'improve my English'. 'Make an AI want to be a good skills' is incoherent; likely meant 'develop good skills'. Suggestion: use 'practice' as a verb, correct articles, and use clear verbs for skill development.

× I think knows because I like the place where I am studied. Umm, it has an more quietly place and we have a more activities there's to support us when I am with study.

✓ I think so because I like the place where I study. Umm, it is a quieter place and we have more activities there to support us when we study.

Errors: 'knows' wrong form; use 'so' for agreement. 'Where I am studied' incorrect passive; use 'where I study'. 'Has an more quietly place' wrong article, adjective order and form: 'is a quieter place'. 'We have a more activities there's' incorrect quantifier and word order: 'we have more activities there'. 'When I am with study' → 'when we study'. Suggestion: use active forms for ongoing situations, correct adjective/adverb forms and word order.

× I prefers I go to study in a business because I want to be a business woman in the future and get a a higher salaries and opens for me and I have my own business to make it big and influence everywhere.

✓ I prefer to study business because I want to be a businesswoman in the future, earn a higher salary, and open opportunities for myself. I want to have my own business, make it big, and have an influence everywhere.

Errors: 'I prefers' wrong subject-verb agreement; should be 'I prefer'. 'I go to study in a business' incorrect structure; say 'study business' or 'study business administration'. 'be a business woman' -> 'be a businesswoman' (one word). 'get a a higher salaries' wrong article and plural; use 'earn a higher salary' or 'higher salaries' depending on meaning. 'opens for me' should be 'open opportunities for me' or 'open opportunities for myself'. Suggestion: use base verb after 'I prefer', correct noun forms (compound nouns), and ensure agreement between singular/plural nouns and articles.