Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear, relevant and natural. To improve further, make the structure slightly more concise and add a brief reason why you study (showing motivation). Avoid using too many clauses in one sentence to keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I'm currently working as a graphic designer. I also take evening classes in digital marketing because I want to expand my skill set and handle client campaigns more effectively.

제안: Your answer is informative but has a small grammar issue (tense and duplicated word) and could be more concise. Use present tense if you still attend, correct the repetition, and add one specific detail about the center to enrich the answer.

예시: I study at a training center in the city centre, which is convenient for my commute after work. The center has evening classes and a well-equipped computer lab that I use for coursework.

제안: Good use of specific points (facilities, classrooms, instructors). Reduce hesitation ("uh") and connect points with a linking phrase to improve fluency. You could add a brief example to make it more concrete.

예시: Yes, it is. The facilities are modern and classrooms are well equipped, and the instructors are highly supportive. For example, they offer one-on-one feedback after classes which really helps my progress.

제안: Clear, relevant and specific. To improve, use a linking word to justify the request and give a short consequence or suggestion for improvement (what expanding would allow). Keep it concise.

예시: Yes. I wish they would expand the self-study area because it gets overcrowded before major exams, and a larger space would allow students to focus and access computers more easily.

제안: There are grammar and clarity issues here and an unclear term ('Tatar analytics' likely incorrect). Use future tense clearly, correct vocabulary (e.g., 'data analytics' or a known certification), and explain briefly why the certification matters. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: After I finish this marketing course, I plan to get certified in data analytics to strengthen my professional qualifications. This certification will help me analyze campaign performance and make data-driven decisions.

× I studied at a training center located in in the city center, which is quite convenient for me to commute to after work.

✓ I study at a training center located in the city center, which is quite convenient for me to commute to after work.

The original sentence has two issues: a redundant repeated preposition 'in in' and an incorrect verb tense. The question is in present tense 'Where do you study?', so the student should use present tense 'I study' rather than past 'I studied'. Remove the duplicate 'in' to correct the preposition error. Suggestion: use present tense to match the question and write 'located in the city center'.

× The facilities are modern, the classrooms are well equipped, and the instructors are very, uh, supportive and professional.

✓ The facilities are modern, the classrooms are well equipped, and the instructors are very supportive and professional.

The filler 'uh' interrupts the sentence and is not needed in written responses; it can be removed for clarity. Grammatically the sentence is fine after removing the filler. Suggestion: omit fillers in formal or written responses to improve fluency and clarity.

× I wish they could expand the self study area as it often gets overcrowded during peak hour before a major exam.

✓ I wish they could expand the self-study area, as it often gets overcrowded during peak hours before a major exam.

Two problems: 'self study' should be hyphenated as 'self-study' when used as a compound noun modifier, and 'peak hour' should be plural 'peak hours' because overcrowding happens during peak times (general plural). Also adding a comma before 'as' improves readability. Suggestion: use correct compound forms and pluralize when referring to recurring time periods.

× Once I finish this marketing course, I've learnt to get certified in Tatar analytics to approach my professional qualifications.

✓ Once I finish this marketing course, I plan to get certified in data analytics to advance my professional qualifications.

Multiple issues: 'I've learnt' (present perfect) is incorrect here because the action is a future intention after finishing the course. Use a future-intention phrase such as 'I plan to' or 'I will' followed by the base verb 'get certified'. Also 'Tatar analytics' appears to be a mistaken term; likely 'data analytics' fits context. 'Approach my professional qualifications' is unidiomatic; use 'advance my professional qualifications'. Suggestion: use correct future-intention construction and precise terminology (e.g., 'I plan to get certified in data analytics to advance my professional qualifications').