Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сосредоточьтесь на ясной и краткой структуре: начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте одно-два связанных предложения с конкретной информацией. Избавьтесь от заполнителей («uh», «umm») и повторов. Практикуйте употребление времён (например: «I will graduate in two years») и точных фраз (например: «I am preparing for university entrance exams»).

예시: I am a student and I will graduate in two years. At the moment I am preparing for my university entrance exams, so I study several hours every day to improve my grades and get into a good university.

제안: Давайте более структурированное и конкретное описание: прямой ответ о текущем месте учёбы, затем одна поддерживающая деталь о намерении переехать и причинах. Избегайте грамматических ошибок с временами и предлогами (например: «in my hometown», «in a small town»).

예시: I study in a small school in my hometown. However, I plan to move to a larger city to continue my studies because it offers better universities and more opportunities.

제안: Дайте чёткое мнение в начале, затем разверните причину с логической связкой. Избегайте общих фраз и повторов; используйте связки («because», «however», «for example»). Приводите конкретные аспекты (учителя, ресурсы, атмосфера).

예시: I think it can be a good place to study because it has dedicated teachers and a quiet atmosphere. However, students must be disciplined and motivated; with those qualities anyone can succeed there.

제안: Чётко назовите одно-два конкретных изменения и объясните, почему они важны. Избегайте неясных слов и ошибок (например, «modern facilities», «the building is falling apart»). Используйте связки для ясности («for example», «so that»).

예시: Yes. I would like the school to have more modern facilities, such as updated classrooms and reliable heating. For example, renovating the building and adding computers would improve learning conditions.

제안: Отвечайте прямо и логично: начните с чёткого утверждения о плане, затем уточните шаги и сроки. Уберите паузы и дублирование, исправьте грамматику («for one year», «I need to stay in my country for one year»). Добавьте причину выбора Италии или конкретную цель.

예시: I plan to study in Italy because I admire its culture and universities. First I will spend one year in my home country preparing applications and improving my language skills, and then I hope to enroll in an Italian university next year.

× I am a student but I am graduating uh, but I am graduating from school next two year and I'm so excited before it umm.

✓ I am a student and I will graduate from school in two years, and I'm so excited about it.

The student mixes present continuous with future time expressions. Use 'will graduate' or 'am graduating' with 'next' requires 'next two years' is incorrect; say 'in two years'. Also use 'excited about it' rather than 'excited before it'. Suggestion: choose the correct future form and correct time expression; use 'in two years' and 'excited about it'.

× So I think about uh, my exam, a future exam and uh right now I'm prepared for my future exam for passing them well and going to university.

✓ So I am thinking about my exams, my future exams, and right now I'm preparing for them to pass well and go to university.

Use present continuous 'am thinking' and 'am preparing' for ongoing actions. 'Exam' should be plural 'exams' and 'for passing them well' should be 'to pass them well'. Also 'going to university' is simplified to 'go to university'. Suggestion: use continuous forms for current activities and correct infinitive 'to pass'.

× I started in my native from town at a small town and I've started there, but I'm going to I want to live and study in another city.

✓ I started school in my small native town and I want to live and study in another city.

Original sentence is redundant and ungrammatical ('started in my native from town at a small town'). Use concise structure: 'started school in my small native town'. 'I'm going to I want to' is mixed forms; use 'I want to'. Suggestion: remove redundancy and choose one clear verb form.

× So yeah, right now I'm starting my on my hometown.

✓ So yeah, right now I'm staying in my hometown.

'Starting my on my hometown' is nonsensical. Likely intended 'staying in my hometown' or 'living in my hometown'. Use present continuous 'I'm staying' for current temporary situation. Suggestion: use 'staying' or 'living' as appropriate.

× I would like to say that it's the best place to study or the worst place to study because it depends on you or depends on your skills and talent and of course on discipline.

✓ I would like to say that it can be the best place to study or the worst, because it depends on you, your skills and talents, and of course your discipline.

Use modal 'can be' to indicate possibility. Also improve noun agreement 'skills and talents' and possessive 'your discipline'. Suggestion: use 'can be' for possibilities and correct parallel structure.

× If you want to study, you will. You will study anyways. Very great, very good. So it's not bad.

✓ If you want to study, you will; you will study anyway. It's fine.

Redundant repetition and informal 'anyways' should be 'anyway'. 'Very great, very good' is awkward; use concise 'It's fine' or 'That's good'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use standard adverb 'anyway'.

× Yes, of course I would like to make our schools more, umm, modern because it's loose really, uh, falling my way.

✓ Yes, of course I would like to make our schools more modern because they are really dilapidated and falling apart.

'Loose' is incorrect adjective for buildings; use 'dilapidated' or 'falling apart'. Also 'it's' should be 'they are' to match plural 'schools'. 'Falling my way' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use correct adjectives and match subject number.

× So there should be restive and something like that because it's like already say it's loose, not great and not more than of course.

✓ So they should be renovated or modernized because, as I said, they are run-down and not very good.

'Restive' is the wrong word; probably 'restored' or 'renovated'. 'Not more than of course' is unclear and ungrammatical. Use clear verbs 'renovated' or 'modernized' and adjectives 'run-down'. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary and simplify the sentence.

× So it's really interesting questions because I'm going to study in Italy.

✓ So it's a really interesting question because I'm going to study in Italy.

Number agreement: 'questions' should be singular 'question' because speaker refers to the current question. 'I'm going to study in Italy' is acceptable future plan. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches context.

× It's my biggest, uh, it's my biggest dream I've ever had.

✓ It's my biggest dream.

Redundant repetition 'it's my biggest' repeated and 'I've ever had' is unnecessary after 'biggest dream'. Simplify to a single concise sentence. Suggestion: avoid redundancy.

× But uh, first, umm, but I need to go to my own country for one years and then I can only go into Italian university.

✓ But first, I need to stay in my own country for one year, and then I can go to an Italian university.

'One years' incorrect plural; use 'one year'. 'Go into Italian university' should be 'go to an Italian university' and 'can only go' word order improved to 'then I can go'. Suggestion: correct number agreement and preposition 'to'.

× So I'm really excited.

✓ So I'm really excited.

This sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. Suggestion: none.