Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear. Start with a simple topic sentence that answers the question (e.g., "I am currently not working; I am at home after finishing my studies"). Use 2–3 short supporting sentences explaining your current situation and plans. Avoid unclear words and aim for correct grammar (present simple/continuous).

예시: I am currently not working; I am staying at home after finishing my higher education. At the moment I am looking for suitable work in my field, and I am also improving my skills through online courses to prepare for future job opportunities.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence (name the city or say "the capital city"). Use linking words to show sequence (e.g., "I moved there to study, and I completed my degree"). Keep details specific and grammatical.

예시: I studied in Kathmandu, the capital city of Nepal. I moved there from my hometown to attend university and completed my degree there over four years.

제안: Start with a direct answer (Yes/No) and then give 2–3 specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "also"). Avoid unclear phrases and pronunciation mistakes; use correct nouns and plural/singular forms.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to study because there are more opportunities for internships and jobs. Also, the city has better healthcare and higher-quality educational institutions, which helps students prepare for their future careers.

제안: Answer directly and give specific changes you'd like. Use polite phrasing and correct vocabulary (e.g., "harassment" instead of "harass"). Provide reasons and a brief suggestion for improvement using linking words.

예시: Yes, I would like the college to address student safety because there is bullying and harassment on campus. I think the college should enforce stricter disciplinary policies and provide counseling services to protect students and promote a respectful environment.

제안: Give a clear, concise statement about your plans (e.g., "I don't plan to study further right now"). Then explain your reason with one or two supporting details (focus on career and finances). Avoid unclear phrases and check verb forms.

예시: I don't plan to continue studying right now because I want to focus on building my career and becoming financially secure. I plan to gain work experience and save money before considering any further education.

× I either work or story right now I'm stay at home.

✓ I am not studying right now; I am staying at home.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice and structure. 'Either work or story' is unclear; likely 'studying' was intended. 'I'm stay' mixes contractions with base verb. Use correct continuous form 'I am staying' and add a clear clause 'I am not studying right now.' Suggestions: use 'studying' for study activity and pair 'am' with the -ing form for present continuous.

× I already completed my higher education.

✓ I have already completed my higher education.

The sentence uses simple past ('completed') though the action has present relevance. Use present perfect 'have completed' to show completion with current relevance. Suggestion: use 'have' + past participle for actions completed in the past with present consequences.

× So for this moment I'm sort of saying good work for suit my fashion and.

✓ At the moment I am doing freelance work that suits my lifestyle.

The original is unclear and contains wrong word choices ('saying good work for suit my fashion'). 'For this moment' should be 'At the moment.' 'Sort of' can be omitted or used correctly. Suggest replacing with 'doing freelance work that suits my lifestyle' to convey meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct vocabulary.

× I study far from my hometown.

✓ I study far from my hometown.

This sentence is acceptable as written; no article error. It correctly uses no article before 'hometown.' No change needed.

× Uh, it's a city, capital city in Nepal where I came here for my higher education.

✓ It is the capital city of Nepal where I came to pursue my higher education.

The original mixes clauses and misuses 'here' and articles. Use 'the capital city of Nepal' and 'came to' + verb 'pursue' or 'study' for clarity. Remove redundant 'here.' Ensure proper preposition 'to' after 'came.'

× I started here and I completed my degree.

✓ I started my studies here and completed my degree.

The verbs are understandable but 'started here' is vague. Clarify with 'started my studies here.' Both past simple verbs are acceptable if referring to finished actions. Suggest keeping past simple for finished events.

× Yes, of course it's a capital city in Nepal.

✓ Yes, of course it is the capital city of Nepal.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'capital city' and the preposition 'of' to show possession ('capital city of Nepal').

× So here it's loss of sounds for opportunities, better health, better educations and also it's a better quality of education and everyone wants to hear for their future career.

✓ There are lots of opportunities here, better healthcare and better education, and overall a higher quality of education that everyone wants for their future careers.

Original has incorrect phrases: 'loss of sounds' and 'better educations' and misuse of 'hear for.' Use 'There are' to introduce plural 'opportunities.' Use uncountable 'healthcare' and uncountable 'education.' Use 'careers' plural to match 'everyone.' Also 'wants for their future careers' is correct.

× Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?

✓ Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?

This question is grammatically correct and fits the context; no correction needed.

× Yeah, of course, because it's oral college there are lots of bullying and blackmailing and harass.

✓ Yes, of course. Because it is a college with many issues, there is a lot of bullying, blackmailing, and harassment.

'Oral college' is unclear; likely 'local' or 'our college' was intended. Use 'a lot of' or 'lots of' with uncountable nouns. 'Harass' is a verb; use the noun 'harassment.' Ensure 'there is' for uncountable singular collective issues. Suggest clarifying 'local college' or 'our college.'

× So that's kind of thing really want to change and students should be in a disciplined and follow the rules.

✓ Those kinds of things really need to change, and students should be disciplined and follow the rules.

Use plural 'kinds of things' to match 'those' and add modal/auxiliary 'need to' for necessity. 'Be in a disciplined' is incorrect; use 'be disciplined.' Ensure parallel structure: 'should be disciplined and follow the rules.'

× What are your future study plans?

✓ What are your future study plans?

This question is correct as written; no correction needed.

× I'm not planning future starting AD because in this is I more like to focus on my career and financially secure.

✓ I am not planning to continue with further studies right now because I would prefer to focus on my career and become financially secure.

The original mixes word order and incorrect verb forms: 'planning future starting AD' is unclear. Use 'planning to continue with further studies' or 'planning to start a postgraduate degree (if AD means that).' Use 'would prefer' for preference and 'become financially secure' for purpose. Ensure 'to' after 'planning.'

× That's why I like to speak escape story right now.

✓ That is why I would like to focus on my career at the moment.

Original 'speak escape story' is unintelligible. Likely meant 'focus on my career' or 'work to gain experience.' Replace with a clear phrase matching context. Use 'would like to' for polite preference and 'at the moment' for current time.