Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear, direct opening statement (one sentence), then briefly explain your situation with specific details. Avoid hesitations, repetition and confusing words (e.g., "crime school"). Use correct verb forms and articles.

예시: I'm not currently working; I'm a student preparing for college entrance exams at a cram school called Kawaijuku. I attend daily classes in the evenings to review subjects like math and physics.

제안: Start with a topic sentence naming the school, then add specific subjects you study and one detail about your routine or difficulty. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "cram school," "chemistry") and avoid repeating "it's so hard" twice.

예시: I study at a cram school called Kawaijuku, where I focus on physics, mathematics, chemistry and social studies. The courses are intensive, so I have classes most evenings and revise for two hours every night.

제안: Respond directly, then give balanced supporting details using linking words (e.g., "however"). Use correct nouns and plural/singular forms and avoid filler words. Be specific about pros and cons.

예시: Yes, it's a good place to study; the teachers are very experienced and supportive. However, the classrooms are drafty and cold, so I often need an extra jacket during lessons.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating the change you want, then explain why with a specific example and a linking word. Avoid fillers and repetition.

예시: Yes. I would like them to provide more quiet study rooms because after class I often want to continue reviewing, but currently there are no available spaces to concentrate.

제안: Answer directly with a concise plan sentence, then add one or two specific aims and how you will achieve them. Use correct tenses and avoid repeating words.

예시: I plan to enter university to study engineering, and after graduation I want to continue learning through internships and advanced courses to improve my career prospects.

× I'm so afraid to say that but I do not work and I'm not student.

✓ I'm afraid to say this, but I do not work and I'm not a student.

Missing article before 'student' and awkward phrasing 'so afraid to say that'. Add 'a' for countable noun and change wording to 'afraid to say this' for natural expression. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I'm prefer preparing for college entrance examination.

✓ I prefer preparing for the college entrance examination.

Incorrect use of auxiliary 'I'm' with 'prefer'. Use simple present 'I prefer' for routines or preferences. Add 'the' before 'college entrance examination.' Grammar problem type ID: 6

× But I would say student because the school I go to go to is a crime school.

✓ But I would say 'student' because the school I go to is a cram school.

Repeated 'go to' is redundant. Likely 'cram school' (a school for intensive study) was intended, not 'crime school.' Also put 'student' in quotes for clarity. Fixed sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I go to crumb school it's called Kawaijuku and I study physics, maths, chemicals and social studies like many up subject and it was so hard.

✓ I go to a cram school called Kawaijuku, and I study physics, maths, chemistry and social studies and many other subjects, and it is very hard.

Multiple problems: 'crumb school' should be 'cram school'; missing article 'a' before 'cram school'; run-on sentence needs commas and conjunctions; 'chemicals' should be 'chemistry'; 'many up subject' likely 'many other subjects'; use 'it is' or 'it's' and 'very hard' for naturalness. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Every day it's so hard for me.

✓ Every day is very hard for me.

'It's' can be acceptable but 'Every day is very hard for me' is clearer. 'So hard' is informal; 'very hard' is more appropriate in this context. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, it's a good price to study for me, but one thing uh, there is uncomfortable point.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to study for me, but there is one uncomfortable point.

'Price' is incorrect; should be 'place'. 'There is uncomfortable point' needs an article: 'one uncomfortable point.' Rearranged for natural word order. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× It's so cold, but there is there are so many good teacher.

✓ It's very cold, but there are so many good teachers.

Redundant 'there is there are' should be only 'there are' for plural 'teachers'. Use plural 'teachers' and 'very' instead of 'so' for formality. Grammar problem type ID: 12},{

× So I would say it's a good place to study. I recommend for everyone.

✓ So I would say it's a good place to study. I recommend it to everyone.

The verb 'recommend' requires an object and the preposition 'to' for the audience: 'recommend it to everyone.' Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Well, I don't have much complaint for the place, but umm, I want to make more room for self studying because after the classes I want to study more, but there's no place to study more.

✓ Well, I don't have many complaints about the place, but I want more room for self-study because after classes I want to study more, and there is nowhere to do so.

Use plural 'complaints' and 'many' for countable nouns. Use 'about' not 'for' after 'complaint'. 'Self studying' should be 'self-study' (noun) or 'self-studying' (hyphenated). 'There's no place to study more' -> 'there is nowhere to do so' is clearer. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I'm gonna go to college, which I want to go and after graduate, I I keep studying for my for make my life better.

✓ I'm going to go to college, which I want to attend, and after I graduate, I will keep studying to improve my life.

Avoid colloquial 'gonna' in formal speech; use 'going to'. 'Which I want to go' should be 'which I want to attend'. Add 'I' before 'graduate' and use future 'will keep studying'. 'For make my life better' should be 'to improve my life.' Grammar problem type ID: 7