Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence saying your job and where, then give one or two specific details (how long, main duties or what you learned) using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

예시: I work as a receptionist at a textile company in Ludhiana. I have worked there for almost two years, handling phone calls and welcoming clients. This job has taught me better communication and time-management skills, which I find very useful.

제안: Give a clear, organized answer: state your current place of study first, then briefly mention past schools if relevant. Use correct tense and prepositions, and connect points with linking words (e.g., ‘previously’, ‘after’).

예시: I currently study at Gunani Girls College in Ludhiana. Previously, I completed my 10th grade at Nankana School, and then I attended Tejas Tejasing School for higher secondary studies.

제안: Answer directly and support with specific reasons. Use accurate grammar (plural/singular) and linking words (for example, because, for instance). Avoid vague repetitions.

예시: Yes, Ludhiana is a good place to study because it has several well-known institutions, including a medical college that attracts many international and out-of-city students. For example, the presence of diverse students helps create a more competitive academic environment.

제안: Be concise and clear: start with a direct answer (yes/no and why). Give one or two specific reasons and avoid hesitations and fillers. Use past tense correctly when referring to memories and connect ideas with ‘because’ or ‘as’.

예시: No, I would not want significant changes because the campus holds many fond childhood memories for me. For instance, walking past the old classroom reminds me of friends and events from my school days.

제안: Give a clear plan with reasons and some specific details about what you want to study or where exactly. Use accurate grammar and linking words (for example, because, therefore). Avoid overgeneralized statements; explain why the country suits your goals.

예시: I plan to study abroad for my postgraduate degree and I hope to go to Finland because it is known for its high-quality education and safety, especially for women. Therefore, I am researching universities in Helsinki that offer master's programs in education technology.

× Yes, I do work.

✓ Yes, I work.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for simple present affirmative statements. Use the simple present 'I work' to sound natural and grammatically correct.

× I am a receptionist in Punjab and loom.

✓ I am a receptionist in Punjab.

The phrase 'and loom' is unclear and creates a sentence structure error. Remove the unclear word 'loom' unless it names a place or company; if it does, use proper capitalization and punctuation (for example: 'I am a receptionist in Punjab at Loom'). Ensure each sentence conveys a clear single idea.

× I work there almost two years.

✓ I have worked there for almost two years.

When indicating an action that began in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect tense with 'for' to express duration: 'have worked... for almost two years.' Using simple present is incorrect for duration.

× I I also work there now.

✓ I also work there now.

This sentence has a duplicated pronoun and an unnecessary repetition. Use a single 'I' and the present simple 'work' or present continuous 'am working' if emphasizing current ongoing action: 'I also work there now' or 'I am working there now.'

× I also work there.

✓ I also work there.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. (Included to indicate validation.)

× I learn many things there.

✓ I learn many things there.

In conversational present tense this sentence is acceptable to mean a general fact. For emphasis on ongoing learning, you could use present continuous: 'I am learning many things there.' No mandatory correction required.

× It's my best, best experience to work there.

✓ Working there has been my best experience.

Reduce repetition and use a natural adjective-noun order. 'Best experience' should follow the gerund 'working' or be rephrased: 'Working there has been my best experience.' Avoid repeating 'best'.

× I live in Ludhiana and I also study in Ludhiana college and school.

✓ I live in Ludhiana and I study at Ludhiana College and at a school in Ludhiana.

Use 'at' for institutions like colleges and schools. Capitalize proper names and clarify if mentioning two separate institutions. Parallel structure improves clarity.

× I pass out my 10th in Nankana school and after the 10th I admitted in Tejas Tejasing school and my college was Gunani Girls college.

✓ I passed my 10th at Nankana School. After the 10th grade, I was admitted to Tejas Tejasing School, and my college was Gunani Girls College.

Use past simple 'passed' for completed actions. Use 'was admitted to' when describing enrollment in the past. Use 'at' for schools and capitalize proper nouns. Break into shorter sentences for clarity.

× Yes, it is very good place for study because many foreigner are coming in my city for study.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place to study because many foreigners come to my city to study.

Add the indefinite article 'a' before 'very good place.' 'Foreigner' should be plural 'foreigners.' Use 'come to my city' instead of 'are coming in my city' and 'to study' is the correct infinitive for purpose.

× There is a there is a Medical College in the Ludhiana city.

✓ There is a medical college in Ludhiana city.

Remove the duplicate 'there is a.' Use lowercase for non-proper 'medical college' and omit the article before the city: 'in Ludhiana' or 'in the city of Ludhiana.' Avoid redundancy.

× It's a famous college many. Many outside students also.

✓ It is a very famous college, and many students come from outside to study there.

Combine fragmented sentences into one coherent sentence. Use 'students come from outside' to express that many students are from other areas. Maintain subject-verb structure.

× No, I don't like the place where I'm study to make changes because, uh, because there are, there was many memories, uh, about our, uh, childhood and, uh, uh, when, when we, when we were study there.

✓ No, I don't want the place where I study to be changed because there are many memories of our childhood from when we studied there.

'Don't like ... to make changes' is unnatural; use 'don't want ... to be changed.' Use consistent tense: 'there are many memories' and past simple 'we studied there.' Remove filler words and correct verb forms: 'were study' -> 'studied.' Use 'memories of' rather than 'memories about.'

× Uh, so whenever, uh, we go there, uh, we remember many things.

✓ So whenever we go there, we remember many things.

Remove fillers 'uh' and repeated commas. The present tense 'go' and 'remember' are appropriate for habitual actions. Keep the sentence concise.

× I want to go abroad for my further studies.

✓ I want to go abroad for further studies.

This sentence is acceptable; remove 'my' before 'further studies' for more natural phrasing. The future intention is correctly expressed with 'want to.'

× I want to go Finland for my career because Finland is a safest country, especially for girls.

✓ I want to go to Finland for my career because Finland is a safe country, especially for girls.

Add the preposition 'to' after 'go.' Use 'a safe country' not 'a safest'; 'safest' is superlative and requires context (e.g., 'one of the safest countries'). Use 'safe' to express general quality.

× So I want to go there and settle there.

✓ So I want to go there and settle down.

Use 'settle down' as the common phrasal verb meaning to live permanently. Repeating 'there' is redundant; 'go there and settle down' is concise and natural.