Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid trailing or incomplete phrases and limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I'm a college student preparing for my A-level exams. However, when all subjects require attention at the same time, I struggle with time management. For example, balancing revision with extracurricular interests makes scheduling difficult, so I prioritise tasks using a weekly timetable.

제안: Good structure and specific details. Make the answer slightly more fluent by using linking words and correcting small grammar points (e.g., 'I entered this college in July last year'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I study at a college in Penang; I enrolled in July last year. It’s a lovely place with friendly students and helpful lecturers. Although the campus is not very large, it offers good resources such as a clean study area and a well-stocked library.

제안: Answer directly then give one clear reason with linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'concentrating myself' and be careful with word choice ('more free' → 'more relaxed'). Keep it concise.

예시: Yes, it’s a good place to study because I can concentrate there for long periods. However, staying at school for long hours during weekdays can be stressful, so I prefer studying at home at the weekend where the environment is more relaxed.

제안: Be concise and correct grammar ('food are' → 'the food is' or 'meals are'). State the change clearly and give a specific reason and possible improvement. Avoid colloquial fillers like 'like' and long awkward clauses.

예시: Yes. I would like the school cafeteria to lower its prices because meals are quite expensive. For instance, cheaper protein options would help students afford more nutritious lunches and stay energised for afternoon classes.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about your plan, then briefly mention uncertainty and a specific next step. Correct small grammar (e.g., 'Hong Kong University' → 'the University of Hong Kong' and 'meet the academic requirements') and avoid awkward phrasing like 'tackling with the exams'.

예시: At the moment I hope to study dentistry at the University of Hong Kong, although I’m not completely certain. My interests change occasionally, and I still need to meet the academic requirements, so for now I am concentrating on preparing for my A-level exams.

× I'm a student and I'm currently studying in a college preparing for my A level exam and I find that all the subjects are actually.

✓ I'm a student and I'm currently studying at a college preparing for my A-level exams, and I find that all the subjects are challenging.

The sentence is awkward and incomplete: 'in a college' should be 'at a college' (preposition; see ID 11), 'A level' should be hyphenated and plural as 'A-level exams', and the clause 'I find that all the subjects are actually.' is incomplete and unclear. I replaced it with 'challenging' to complete the idea. Suggestion: break long sentences into clearer parts and ensure each clause has a clear predicate. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I study in the College in Penang and I've entered this college last year July and it's a lovely place with a lot of friendly people and also helpful lecturers.

✓ I study at the college in Penang and I entered this college in July last year; it's a lovely place with a lot of friendly people and helpful lecturers.

Use 'at' for institutions (preposition error ID 11). For time expressions, use 'in July last year' rather than 'last year July'. Also 'I've entered this college last year' mixes present perfect with a finished time; use simple past 'I entered' (past tense issue ID 5). Suggestion: use 'at' for study places and match tense with explicit past time expressions. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× The building isn't really large but they have good resources like a clean study area and a big library.

✓ The building isn't very large, but it has good resources like a clean study area and a large library.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'the building' is singular, so use 'it has' rather than 'they have' (subject-verb/pronoun error ID 27 and 12). Also prefer 'very' to 'really' in this context and 'large' consistent for the library. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents and use consistent adjectives. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× I think it's a great place if I want to spend hours concentrating myself on studying, but sometimes it can be a little bit stressful because I need to stay at school for long hours during weekdays.

✓ I think it's a great place if I want to spend hours concentrating on my studies, but sometimes it can be a little stressful because I need to stay at school for long hours during the weekdays.

'Concentrating myself on studying' is awkward: use 'concentrating on my studies' (verb + -ing and reflexive issue ID 8 and 15). 'A little bit' can be simplified to 'a little' and include 'the' before 'weekdays' for natural phrasing (article/preposition IDs 22/11). Suggestion: avoid unnecessary reflexive pronouns and use natural collocations like 'concentrating on my studies'. Grammar problem type ID: 15

× So in the weekend I would rather study at home so I have a more comfortable environment and it can be more free.

✓ So on the weekend I would rather study at home because I have a more comfortable environment and more freedom.

Preposition: use 'on the weekend' or 'at the weekend' depending on variety (ID 11). Repeating 'so' is redundant; use 'because' for reason (conjunction error ID 16). 'It can be more free' is unnatural; use 'more freedom'. Suggestion: choose one conjunction to signal cause and use natural noun phrases like 'more freedom'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Actually, I hope that the school cafeteria can improve on their pricing because right now the food are so expensive that I don't dare to take like one more piece of meat so that I feel more energetic later in the day.

✓ Actually, I hope that the school cafeteria can improve its pricing because right now the food is so expensive that I don't dare to buy even one more piece of meat to feel more energetic later in the day.

Subject-verb/pronoun agreement: 'cafeteria' is singular so use 'its' (ID 12). 'The food are' is incorrect; 'food' is uncountable and takes singular verb 'is' (singular/plural issue ID 1). 'Take' is awkward for buying food; use 'buy' and 'even' instead of 'like' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure agreement, use correct countability for 'food', and choose appropriate verbs like 'buy'. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Right now I'm having a plan of studying dentistry in the Hong Kong University, but I'm not 100% sure on this because my ambitions change from time to time and I also need to meet the academics requirement.

✓ Right now I plan to study dentistry at the University of Hong Kong, but I'm not 100% sure because my ambitions change from time to time and I also need to meet the academic requirements.

Articles and proper noun form: use 'the University of Hong Kong' or 'the Hong Kong University' rarely; common English is 'the University of Hong Kong' and 'at' rather than 'in' (article/preposition ID 17/11). 'I'm having a plan of studying' is awkward; use 'I plan to study' (sentence structure ID 26). 'Academics requirement' should be 'academic requirements' (adjective and plural noun agreement ID 13 and 1). Suggestion: use standard institution names, simpler verbs like 'plan', and correct adjective+noun forms. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× So for the moment I will focus on tackling with the exams.

✓ So for the moment I will focus on tackling the exams.

'Tackle with' is ungrammatical; use 'tackle' without 'with' or use 'deal with the exams' (verb + -ing/preposition ID 8 and 11). Suggestion: learn common verb patterns: 'tackle something' (no 'with') or 'deal with something'. Grammar problem type ID: 8