Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (I’m a student), then add one short supporting detail about your current situation using correct grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words if needed.

예시: I’m currently a student; I’ve just finished my Grade 12 exams, so I’m taking a short break to rest before deciding my next steps.

제안: Give a clearer, more natural answer and add one specific detail about the school. Use correct noun phrases and avoid filler words like “OK.”

예시: I study at Basic Education High School Online No.1, which is an accredited online high school that offers interactive lessons and flexible schedules.

제안: Respond directly and clearly. Give one or two specific reasons why you think it is a good place, and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words (for example, because, since) to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, it’s a good place to study because I’ve been there for eight years and the teachers are supportive, which helped me improve my grades and enjoy learning.

제안: Answer more directly and politely. State the change you want, explain why it’s necessary with specific problems, and suggest a simple improvement. Remove repetitions and incorrect words (e.g., “beauty was very distorting”).

예시: Yes. I would renovate the sports stadium because the surface is uneven and lacks proper equipment, which prevents students from playing badminton or soccer safely; improving the pitch and adding nets would help.

제안: Give a clear, confident plan with one or two concrete details. Remove fillers and correct phrasing (e.g., “full scholarship” not “full-friendly”). Mention a country or field and a reason. Use linking words like because or so.

예시: I plan to study abroad, possibly in Australia or Canada, because they offer strong programs in my field; I’m applying for a full scholarship since I don’t have the funds to pay tuition.

× I'm a student but I have finished my grade 12 exam and now I'm resting my time.

✓ I'm a student, but I have finished my Grade 12 exams and now I'm resting.

Mixed tense and awkward phrase: 'have finished' (present perfect) is acceptable to show recent completion, but 'my grade 12 exam' should be plural 'exams' and 'resting my time' is incorrect idiom. Use 'resting' or 'taking a break'. Also capitalize 'Grade'. Improve by making noun plural and using natural expression for resting.

× OK I study at the basic education high school online #1.

✓ I study at Basic Education High School No. 1 online.

Article and word order: school names are capitalized and usually do not use 'the' if the proper name is given. Use 'No. 1' for numbering. Place 'online' after the full name for clarity. Also remove the unnecessary 'OK' when answering.

× Of course it is a good place to study. I have a story and there for eight years and I actually love the school and if you like my if you like the part of my life.

✓ Of course it is a good place to study. I have been there for eight years, and I actually love the school because it is an important part of my life.

Tense and structure: 'I have a story and there for eight years' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect continuous or present perfect passive: 'I have been there for eight years'. Remove repetition 'if you like my if you like'. Clarify reason with 'because' and 'part of my life'.

× OK, OK. If I had to choose one I like then to change the sports stadium because it is not good enough for a student to play badminton or soccer and the beauty was very distorting.

✓ If I had to choose one thing to change, I would change the sports stadium because it is not good enough for students to play badminton or soccer, and its appearance is very unattractive.

Conditional and modal: Use second conditional 'If I had to choose... I would...'. 'One I like then to change' is ungrammatical—use 'one thing to change'. 'A student' should be plural 'students' for general statements. 'The beauty was very distorting' is incorrect; use 'its appearance is very unattractive' or 'it looks very poor'.

× OK, I think I will go to another country to study and I hope I can get full-friendly scholarship because I had not the budget and I, I, I think, umm, I will.

✓ I think I will go to another country to study, and I hope I can get a fully funded scholarship because I do not have the budget.

Word choice and article: 'full-friendly scholarship' is incorrect; use 'fully funded scholarship'. Use 'a' before 'fully funded scholarship'. 'I had not the budget' is wrong tense and structure—use present 'I do not have the budget' or 'I do not have enough money'. Remove filler repetitions. Use commas to join clauses properly.