Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сосредоточьтесь на простых правильных предложениях, избегайте лишних пауз и повторов. Начните с чёткой темы (I am a student / I work), затем добавьте одну-две короткие детали: где учитесь и чем занимаетесь дополнительно. Работайте над грамматикой времен (present simple) и согласованием (I work, I study).

예시: I am a student. I study languages at school, and in my free time I work in a park selling tickets to visitors.

제안: Отвечайте прямо на вопрос: назовите место обучения, затем коротко объясните, почему. Избегайте повторов («I prefer I prefer») и излишних слов. Употребляйте простые причины в настоящем времени и свяжите идеи связующим словом (because, so).

예시: I study at a local school and attend an English language center because I want to improve my English skills, which will help me get a good job in the future.

제안: Дайте чёткий ответ (Yes/No) с кратким объяснением и конкретным примером. Уберите слова-паразиты (uh) и тавтологии. Используйте связки (for example, because) для логики ответа.

예시: Yes, it is. My school is one of the most popular in the country, and the English center is very useful. For example, I go there every day to learn new skills that will help me find a good job.

제안: Отвечайте ясно: скажите, что вы хотели бы изменить, и дайте одно-две конкретные причины. Избегайте повторов и неправильной структуры. Используйте корректные существительные и глаголы (desk, teacher cannot write on it).

예시: Yes, I would change the desks because they are very old. For example, teachers cannot write on them properly, which makes lessons less effective.

제안: Дайте организованный ответ: начните с основной цели, затем добавьте конкретные действия (enter university, study abroad) и причину. Избегайте разговорных сокращений (wanna) и повторов. Используйте будущее время и простые конструкции.

예시: In the future I want to enter a good university abroad to study and gain experience. After that, I hope to find a good job and continue learning to become successful.

× Today I haven't worked in so I have a student uh.

✓ Today I haven't worked, so I am not working; I am a student.

The student used incorrect tense and wording. 'I haven't worked' (present perfect) is possible but 'in so I have a student' is ungrammatical. Likely intended meaning: they did not work today and they are a student. Use 'so' to connect clauses and 'I am a student' for current status. Improve by using clear clause connections and present simple for facts.

× I learn new languages at school and when I have a free time I also working in park and give tickets for other people.

✓ I learn new languages at school, and when I have free time I also work in the park and give tickets to other people.

Errors: unnecessary article in 'a free time', missing auxiliary for continuous (should be 'work' not 'working'), missing preposition 'to' with 'give tickets to'. Use simple present 'work' for habitual actions and correct prepositions and articles.

× I study at school and English center I because I prefer I prefer to stay a big and successful person in the future and I think it helped me to in the future I learn English because I think it's helped me to find a good job.

✓ I study at a school and an English center because I prefer to become a successful person in the future, and I think learning English will help me to find a good job.

Multiple issues: Missing articles before 'school' and 'English center' (use 'a'), repetition and awkward phrasing. Use 'become' rather than 'stay a big and successful person'. Use 'learning English' (gerund) as noun and future 'will help' rather than past 'helped'. Improve by simplifying and choosing correct verb forms and articles.

× Uh, yes, my school is very same most popular in our own country and uh, I think uh, English 10 very good place for study.

✓ Yes, my school is one of the most popular in our country, and I think English 10 is a very good place to study.

'Very same most popular' is incorrect; use 'one of the most popular'. 'Our own country' is redundant; 'our country' is sufficient. Missing verb 'is' before 'a very good place' and missing infinitive 'to study'. Improve adjective order and include necessary verbs.

× Uh, for example, everyday I go to the, uh, English center and learn new things and it helps me to in the future, uh, find a good job.

✓ For example, every day I go to the English center and learn new things, and it will help me in the future to find a good job.

Errors: 'everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase). Extra comma before English center unneeded. Use future 'will help' to indicate result; correct word order 'help me in the future to find'.

× Uh yes, I like uh to change our desk because it's very old desk and our teacher cannot explain uh our to A and write on a desk.

✓ Yes, I would like to change our desks because they are very old, and our teacher cannot explain things properly or write on the desks.

Pronoun and noun agreement errors: 'our desk' vs plural idea 'desks' and 'it's very old desk' missing article; use 'they are' for plural. 'Explain our to A' is nonsensical; likely 'explain things properly'. Use plural 'desks' and correct pronouns and verbs.

× In the future, I wanna enter a good uh university or, or find a good job, and I think to I prefer to stay a successful person and learn new things, and also uh, I need to enter a good uh university in another country.

✓ In the future, I want to enter a good university or find a good job. I prefer to become a successful person and learn new things, and I also want to attend a good university in another country.

'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. Redundant phrases and incorrect infinitive use 'I think to I prefer'—should be 'I prefer to become'. 'Need to enter' can be 'want to attend'. Improve formality, remove redundancies, and correct infinitive verbs.