Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak with correct grammar and a clear topic sentence. Begin with a direct answer (e.g., "I both work and study") and correct verb forms. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences), avoid redundancy, and add one specific detail about hours or duties to make it informative.

예시: I both work and study. I'm a full-time master's student at RMIT and I also work a casual job in retail for about 12 hours a week, which I balance by planning my study schedule on weekends.

제안: Give a clear, grammatical answer naming the institution and one specific reason or feature. Avoid unclear phrases and stick to simple, correct sentences. Use linking words if adding a reason (e.g., "because").

예시: I study at RMIT University, which is well located in Melbourne's CBD. I chose it because it has strong industry connections in technology and easy access to public transport.

제안: Answer directly and provide one clear supporting reason. Fix grammar and sentence flow: start with a direct statement, then add a linked reason using "because" or "as". Use specific vocabulary related to your major.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to study because RMIT has excellent technology programs. I am studying for a Master of Business Information Technology, and the university's industry-focused courses are very relevant to my field.

제안: Respond directly and clearly state whether you'd like changes. Describe one specific change and explain why it matters, using linking words (e.g., "for example"/"because"). Correct vocabulary: say "fewer elective courses" or "limited elective options" and explain the impact on students.

예시: Yes, I would like one change: RMIT should offer more elective options because students currently have fewer electives to choose from, which limits our ability to tailor the course to our interests.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about your plan, then give a specific reason and link it. Use correct terms (e.g., "financial courses" not "financial costs") and avoid informal phrases like "wanna." Keep it to 2–3 sentences and provide a concrete goal.

예시: After I finish my master's degree, I plan to take some financial courses because my professors recommended them. Learning finance will help me understand the business side of technology companies and prepare me for management roles.

× Currently I working and studying at the same times.

✓ Currently I am working and studying at the same time.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for present continuous and incorrect plural 'times' should be singular 'time'. Use 'I am working' for present continuous and 'at the same time' is the correct idiom. Suggestion: Add the correct form of 'to be' (am) and use the singular idiom 'at the same time'.

× I'm a full time master degree student and past time working casual job so I think I balance that very well.

✓ I'm a full-time master's degree student and work part-time in a casual job, so I think I balance them very well.

Multiple issues: 'full time' should be hyphenated 'full-time' as a compound adjective; 'master degree' needs possessive form 'master's degree'; 'past time' is incorrect—should be 'part-time'; verb form should be 'work' not 'working' to match sentence structure; 'casual job' needs an article 'a casual job' or rephrasing; pronoun reference 'that' should be plural 'them' referring to two activities. Suggestion: Use correct compound adjectives and possessive form, and consistent verb forms.

× I'm studying at RMIT University, the well located in Melbourne CBD.

✓ I'm studying at RMIT University, which is well located in Melbourne CBD.

Missing relative pronoun 'which' to connect clauses; word order 'well located' needs a relative clause 'which is well located'. Suggestion: Use 'which is' before 'well located' to form a correct relative clause.

× This university fit much about take or Andy Sai.

✓ This sentence is unclear; possible correction: 'This university offers many programs that suit my interests.'

Original sentence is ungrammatical and contains unrecognizable fragments ('fit much about take or Andy Sai'). It lacks a clear subject-verb-object structure. Suggestion: Rephrase to a clear meaning, for example 'This university offers many programs that suit my interests.' If a different meaning was intended, provide specific details to reconstruct the sentence.

× Yes, Is it And I think it's really good place to study my major as well.

✓ Yes, and I think it's a really good place to study my major as well.

Incorrect capitalization and word order: 'Is it And' is incorrect; missing article 'a' before 'really good place.' Suggestion: Remove the extraneous words, start with 'Yes, and...' and include the article 'a' before 'really good place'.

× My major is Master of Business Information Technology and RMIT is quite famous about technology.

✓ My major is Master of Business Information Technology, and RMIT is quite famous for technology.

Use of preposition 'about' is incorrect; 'famous for' is the correct collocation. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'famous for' when indicating the reason or field for reputation.

× Guess I would like to make any changes, for example in RMIT.

✓ I guess I would like to make some changes, for example at RMIT.

Missing subject 'I' at start and 'any changes' is awkward in affirmative sentence—use 'some changes.' Preposition 'at' is more natural for institutions ('at RMIT'). Suggestion: Start with 'I guess' and use 'some' in affirmative contexts.

× They have really less elective cost for each matter, so I think it's not good for students.

✓ They have very low elective fees for each subject, so I think it's not good for students.

'Really less' is ungrammatical; use 'very low' or 'lower' with countable/uncountable nouns. 'Elective cost' is better expressed as 'elective fees' and 'each matter' should be 'each subject.' Suggestion: Use 'very low' or 'lower' and correct nouns: 'elective fees' and 'subject'.

× My study plan in the future is after I finish my master degree, I would like to study some financial costs because my teacher and my professor recommend me.

✓ My study plan for the future is that after I finish my master's degree, I would like to study some finance courses because my teacher and professor recommended them to me.

Several issues: 'study plan in the future' is better 'study plan for the future'; 'master degree' needs possessive 'master's degree'; 'study some financial costs' is wrong—likely 'study some finance courses'; verb tense 'recommend' should be past 'recommended' if referring to a past recommendation; 'recommend me' needs indirect object 'recommended them to me.' Suggestion: Use correct noun phrases and past participle where appropriate and clarify object of recommendation.

× Like if I wanna continue with this kind of business like technology business, I should know.

✓ For example, if I want to continue in this kind of business, such as technology business, I should learn about finance.

'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to'; sentence structure is repetitive ('like ... like') and unclear; 'should know' is vague—specify 'should learn about finance.' Suggestion: Use formal 'want to', avoid repeating 'like', and state the object of learning clearly.