Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện: Trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và chính xác. Chú ý ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'a third-year student', 'majoring in Vietnamese studies', 'assignments' số nhiều) và tránh lặp từ. Thêm một câu hỗ trợ ngắn với liên từ phù hợp (because / so) để giải thích hoạt động hiện tại. Ngoài ra giữ tổng số câu không quá 5.

예시: I'm a third-year student majoring in Vietnamese Studies. At the moment I focus mainly on my coursework because I attend classes regularly and spend most of my time doing assignments.

제안: Cải thiện: Câu hiện tại có lỗi nội dung và ngữ pháp (câu về 'my mother is Vietnamese studies' không hợp lệ). Trả lời nên nêu tên hoặc loại trường ngắn gọn rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về chuyên ngành. Dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, where I study ...). Sử dụng cấu trúc đơn giản và chính xác.

예시: I study at (name of) university in Vietnam, where I am enrolled in the Vietnamese Studies program. There I learn about Vietnamese culture, history, tourism and traditional customs.

제안: Cải thiện: Loại bỏ từ ngữ thừa như 'Then' hay lặp từ ('teacher teachers'). Bổ sung ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: library, seminars) để minh họa lý do. Sử dụng liên từ (because, for example, moreover) để kết nối ý và chú ý số ít/ nhiều (teachers).

예시: Yes, I think it's a good place to study because the teachers are very helpful and the campus provides a comfortable learning environment. For example, there are well-equipped libraries and regular seminars that help me broaden my knowledge.

제안: Cải thiện: Câu rối, nhiều lỗi (thừa 'Then', lặp 'library', 'have a picture learning experience' không rõ nghĩa). Trả lời trực tiếp nêu một hoặc hai thay đổi cụ thể, giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao và cách nó giúp sinh viên. Dùng liên từ như 'for example' hoặc 'so that'.

예시: Yes, I think the university should improve its library and study areas so students can study more comfortably. For example, extending opening hours and adding more quiet study rooms would make it easier to concentrate.

제안: Cải thiện: Câu thiếu rõ ràng và nhiều lỗi (lặp 'English', 'gain more knowledge in my mother', 'after garden' vô nghĩa). Trình bày kế hoạch cụ thể (ví dụ: improve English, take a master's degree, internships) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng, đúng ngữ pháp.

예시: In the future I plan to improve my English skills and take courses related to Vietnamese culture. I also hope to gain practical experience through internships and then find a job in the tourism or cultural sector.

× I'm currently a third year student managing in Vietnamese studies.

✓ I'm currently a third-year student majoring in Vietnamese Studies.

Use present continuous to describe current status is fine, but word choice and compounds are wrong. 'Managing in' is incorrect; the correct verb for a field of study is 'majoring in'. 'Third year' as a compound adjective needs a hyphen: 'third-year'. Proper noun for the department should be capitalized: 'Vietnamese Studies'. Suggestion: use 'I'm currently a third-year student majoring in Vietnamese Studies.'

× At the moment I focus mainly on my studies and spend most of my time attending classes and doing assignment.

✓ At the moment I focus mainly on my studies and spend most of my time attending classes and doing assignments.

The noun 'assignment' should be plural if referring to general coursework: 'assignments'. 'Doing assignment' is uncountable here; use plural. The rest of the sentence structure is acceptable in present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: use plural 'assignments' when talking about multiple pieces of coursework.

× I study at university in Vietnam.

✓ I study at a university in Vietnam.

When speaking generally about attending a single institution, use the indefinite article 'a' before 'university': 'at a university'. Omitting the article makes the sentence ungrammatical in this context. Suggestion: include the article: 'at a university in Vietnam.'

× My mother is Vietnamese studies where I learn about Vietnamese culture, history, tourism and traditions.

✓ My major is Vietnamese Studies, where I learn about Vietnamese culture, history, tourism, and traditions.

The sentence incorrectly says 'My mother is Vietnamese studies.' Likely intended 'My major' or 'My department'. 'My mother' is incorrect. Use 'major' for field of study. Also add commas in a list and capitalize the department name. Use 'where I learn' to introduce the clause. Suggestion: replace 'My mother' with 'My major' and correct capitalization and punctuation.

× Then I think it's a good place because the teacher teachers are helpful and their learning environment is quite comfortable.

✓ I think it's a good place because the teachers are helpful and the learning environment is quite comfortable.

'Then' at the start is unnecessary; use 'I think' alone. 'Teacher teachers' is a repetition/error; use 'teachers'. Use 'the learning environment' rather than 'their learning environment' when referring to the university as a whole. These changes improve clarity and grammar. Suggestion: remove 'Then' and correct 'teacher teachers' to 'teachers'.

× Also, I have many opportunities to improve my knowledge.

✓ Also, I have many opportunities to improve my knowledge.

Sentence is grammatical and appropriate in present simple to describe general situation. No correction needed. Suggestion: none.

× Then I would I think the university should improve some frequently, such as the library, library and study areas so students can have a picture learning experience.

✓ I think the university should frequently improve some facilities, such as the library and study areas, so students can have a better learning experience.

Sentence has extraneous 'Then' and duplicated 'I' ('I would I think'). 'Should improve some frequently' is incorrect; 'frequently improve some facilities' is clearer. 'Library, library' duplicates 'library'; remove duplication. 'Picture learning experience' is wrong—likely 'better learning experience'. Use plural 'facilities' for places like library and study areas. Reorder words for natural English. Suggestion: use 'I think the university should frequently improve some facilities, such as the library and study areas, so students can have a better learning experience.'

× In the future I plan to contain improving my English, English, English and gain more knowledge in my mother.

✓ In the future I plan to continue improving my English and gain more knowledge in my major.

'Contain improving' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'continue improving'. The repetition 'English, English, English' is an error—one 'English' is sufficient. 'My mother' is wrong; likely 'my major' or 'my field'. Use parallel structure 'continue improving my English and gain more knowledge in my major.' Suggestion: use 'continue improving' and 'my major'.

× I also hope to find a good job relate relative to tourism or culture after garden rather.

✓ I also hope to find a good job related to tourism or culture after graduation.

This sentence contains multiple errors: 'relate relative to' is incorrect; use the past participle adjective 'related to'. 'After garden rather' is nonsensical; likely intended 'after graduation'. The preposition 'to' follows 'related'. These corrections produce a natural expression of future career hopes. Suggestion: use 'related to' and 'after graduation'.