Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap kısa ve doğrudan; ancak daha doğal ve akıcı olması için biraz genişletilebilir. Konu cümlesinden sonra bir bağlaçla kısa bir ek bilgi verin (ör. hangi sınıf olduğunuz veya ne zaman mezun olacağınız). Ayrıca 'in high school' ifadesi doğal ama 'I'm a high school student' daha akıcıdır.

예시: I'm a high school student. I'm currently in my final year and I'm focusing on science subjects to prepare for university.

제안: Cümle yapısı ve kelime seçimi belirsiz; anlamı net değil. Doğru prepozisyonları kullanın ve açık bir yer bilgisi verin (şehir ve okul adı/çeşidi). Bir topic sentence ile başlayıp sonra kısa bir açıklama ekleyin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri düzenleyin.

예시: I study at a public high school in Istanbul. It's located in the Kadıköy district, which is close to my home, so it's convenient for me.

제안: Cevap karışık ve gramer hataları var; çelişkili ifadeler (not so good but suitable) daha net ifade edilmeli. Olumlu ve olumsuz noktaları açıkça ayırın, nedenlerini spesifik örneklerle destekleyin. Bağlaçlarla mantıklı akış sağlayın ve gereksiz kelime tekrarlarından kaçının.

예시: The school has some problems, such as outdated classrooms, but it suits me well because it offers many extracurricular activities like music and robotics clubs that I enjoy.

제안: Cevap mantıksal çatışma içeriyor ('never change' ama sonra değişiklikten bahsetme). Net bir görüş belirtin: değiştirmek istemiyorsanız nedenini açıkça verin; değiştirmek istiyorsanız hangi değişiklikleri istediğinizi söyleyin. Dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimlerine dikkat edin (ör. 'citizens' yerine 'staff' veya 'people').

예시: I wouldn't want to change my school because it offers many good options and the staff are very supportive. However, I would like the classrooms to be renovated for a better learning environment.

제안: Cevap belirsiz ve dilbilgisi hataları çok; mesleği ve hangi mühendislik dalını düşündüğünüzü net ifade edin. Neden o alanı tercih ettiğinizi ve hangi adımları atmayı planladığınızı belirtin. Kısa, mantıklı cümlelerle ilerleyin ve doğru terimleri kullanın (ör. 'become an engineer', 'mechanical engineering').

예시: I plan to become an engineer, probably in mechanical or industrial engineering. I am preparing by taking advanced math and physics classes and I hope to study engineering at university next year.

× I am in Istanbul under the high school and I'm supposed to in my high school.

✓ I study at a high school in Istanbul and I am supposed to continue at my high school.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and an unclear structure. Use 'study at' for attendance, 'in Istanbul' for location, and 'continue at my high school' to express continuation. Keep the present simple for facts and use clear verbs. ID:26

× Actually not so good but so suitable for me and the public loves the school but you must be allow to come.

✓ Actually it is not very good, but it is suitable for me and the community likes the school, although you must be allowed to attend.

Missing subject and verb, incorrect adjective/adverb choice ('so' vs 'very'), wrong noun ('public' -> 'community'), and incorrect modal passive construction ('must be allow' -> 'must be allowed'). Use 'it is' for descriptions and correct passive form with past participle. ID:13

× There's so much activities and hobbies you can do and so schooling.

✓ There are many activities and hobbies you can do, and many educational opportunities.

'There is' should agree with plural 'activities' (use 'There are'), 'so much' is inappropriate for countable nouns (use 'many'), and 'so schooling' is ungrammatical; replace with 'many educational opportunities'. ID:26

× If I can change, I would never change my school.

✓ If I could change anything, I would not change my school.

Conditional needs correct form: for hypothetical present use 'If I could...' not 'If I can...'. Also match negatives: 'would not' instead of 'would never' is acceptable but 'would not change' is clearer. ID:26

× Irrespective, because the school is so have so viable options and alternatives, the citizens is very good.

✓ Besides, the school has many viable options and alternatives, and the people are very good.

'Irrespective' is misused; use 'Besides' or 'Moreover'. 'is so have so' is ungrammatical; use 'has many'. 'Citizens is' has subject-verb agreement error; use 'people are'. ID:13

× I want to be an engineering in Fisher but I don't find my viable engineering like industrial or mechanical or electronic.

✓ I want to be an engineer in the future, but I haven't found a suitable engineering field, such as industrial, mechanical, or electrical engineering.

Use 'engineer' (noun) not 'engineering' when referring to a profession, 'in the future' not 'in Fisher'. Use articles: 'a suitable engineering field'. 'Electronic' as a field should be 'electrical engineering'. Also correct tense: 'haven't found'. ID:22

× I didn't choose about this but my future plan about studies be being engineer.

✓ I haven't decided about this yet, but my future study plan is to become an engineer.

Use present perfect 'haven't decided' for an undecided recent action. 'Be being engineer' is ungrammatical; use 'is to become an engineer'. Ensure proper infinitive structure for plans. ID:26