Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail (programme and status). Use correct grammar for tense and articles. For fluency, reduce hesitations and filler words.

예시: I’m currently a student; I’m studying for an Executive Master’s in IT and Cybersecurity and I’m due to graduate soon.

제안: Give a direct answer naming the institution clearly and correct the institution name. Use one or two supporting details (programme and reason) with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “you'll be university” and vague endings.

예시: I study in Brussels at VUB University, where I’m completing a postgraduate certificate in IT because I want to switch careers and learn new technical skills.

제안: Answer directly and provide specific comparisons or examples. Use linking words (because, for example, whereas) and avoid fillers. Mention concrete aspects that make it good (teaching quality, facilities, environment).

예시: Yes, it’s a great place to study because the teaching methods are more practical here and the campus facilities are better than where I did my bachelor’s in Ukraine.

제안: Be specific about what should change and give a reason. Use linking words to structure your answer (however, for example, because). Replace vague comments with concrete suggestions (more English support, better career services).

예시: Overall it’s good; however, I would like more English-language support and practical career workshops because many international students need help improving language skills and finding jobs.

제안: Respond clearly with a topic sentence about your plans, then give brief reasons and a future step. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use linking words (so, therefore) and a concrete next action (job type or field).

예시: I don’t plan to continue studying; instead, I want to start working in cybersecurity so I can gain practical experience and apply what I learned.

× I'm not working right now and I I'm still a student because I I'm doing the executive masters in IT and cybersecurity and I I'm waiting for graduation already.

✓ I'm not working right now and I'm still a student because I'm doing an executive master's in IT and cybersecurity and I'm already waiting to graduate.

Multiple present tense and article issues: use contraction 'I'm' once per clause; use present continuous 'I'm doing' correctly; 'executive master's' requires possessive and singular with an article 'an'; 'waiting for graduation' is awkward—'waiting to graduate' is more natural. Remove repeated 'I'. Suggestions: avoid repeating pronouns, include appropriate articles ('an'), and use natural collocations ('waiting to graduate').

× I'm studying in Brussels, it's a you'll be university and I'm studying for postgraduate certificate.

✓ I'm studying in Brussels at a Youwillbe University and I'm studying for a postgraduate certificate.

Preposition and article errors: use 'at' for institutions ('studying at a university'); proper nouns like 'Youwillbe University' should be treated as a name; include the article 'a' before 'postgraduate certificate'. Suggestion: use 'at' with institutions and include indefinite articles before singular countable nouns.

× I just want to switch my career to other paths and to learn more something.

✓ I just want to change my career path and learn more things.

Awkward structure and incorrect phrase 'switch my career to other paths' and 'learn more something'. Use 'change my career path' or 'switch to a different career' and 'learn more things' or 'learn more about something'. Suggestion: simplify and use common collocations: 'change my career path' and 'learn more' followed by an object.

× I think yes, it's a really good experience because I did my bachelor's degrees, uh, in Ukraine and, uh, I see the difference in, uh, in many aspects.

✓ Yes, I think it's a really good experience because I did my bachelor's degree in Ukraine and I see differences in many aspects.

Use singular 'bachelor's degree' rather than plural 'degrees' when referring to one degree. 'See the difference in many aspects' is improved to 'see differences in many aspects' for natural pluralization. Suggestion: use singular for a single completed qualification and pluralize 'differences' when referring to multiple aspects.

× Of course we can see some pros and cons, but uh, it can be improved. But uh, I don't see any big, uh, problems in university, maybe more English, uh, uh.

✓ Of course we can see some pros and cons, and it could be improved. But I don't see any big problems at the university; maybe more English support would help.

Pronoun and article issues: 'it can be improved' is vague—'it could be improved' is more natural for suggestions. 'Problems in university' should be 'problems at the university' or 'in the university' with article. 'Maybe more English' is incomplete; specify 'more English support' or 'more English classes'. Suggestion: use appropriate prepositions ('at the university') and complete noun phrases.

× Uh, I think I am tired of uh studying so I just want to find a job and and work.

✓ I think I am tired of studying, so I just want to find a job and work.

Redundant words and tense usage: remove duplicate 'and' and unnecessary filler 'uh'. 'Tired of studying' correctly uses present tense with 'be + -ing'. Suggestion: eliminate repetitions and fillers to make the sentence fluent.

× I don't want to to study anymore. I think it's enough for me.

✓ I don't want to study anymore. I think it's enough for me.

Typing/repetition error: duplicate 'to' should be a single 'to'. The tense and meaning are correct otherwise. Suggestion: proofread to remove duplicate words.